I'd like feedback on my article: Best Low-Calorie and Easy to Cook Snack. Papad.

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   Polo27posted 3 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Best Low-Calorie and Easy to Cook Snack. Papad an Amazingly Simple and Tasty Finger Food With Your Meals or Drinks. (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Nice article. I never heard them called that before. British people eat lots of them and they are readily available uncooked and ready-cooked in supermarkets, so I wouldn't say they are unfamiliar.
      
      Okay, so the title is way too long and wordy and it needs to use the more familiar (to westerners) name of papadum or popadum. So maybe:
      
      How to Cook and Eat Papadums (Papads)
      
      Your title needs to answer a question or promise to provide information that people are searching for.
      
      Secondly, delete the Amazon capsule and instead use an in-text link to talk about the brand you recommend. Write what you have written in the capsule into a text capsule and use the name of the brand as anchor text. Then click on the link icon in the text capsule. Then on the Amazon tab. You should see the item there. Save.
      
      Watch out for unnecessary capitalisation. Go through the article and change anything that isn't a proper noun. For example, 'pincer or tongs'. Papad is also not a proper noun, so when it appears in a sentence it is 'papad'.
      
      Use the alternative terms for papads throughout the article.
      
      Research the western equivalents of cooking. For instance we don't 'roast over a flame'. Many people don't have open flame cooking. For example, I would fry the poppadom in hot oil, or a very hot oven. Your readers are going to be primarily western, so they need to be able to follow your instructions. So for us, 'roasting' usually means placing a joint of meat or vegetables into a closed oven. Cooking over (or under) a flame or heat source is called 'grilling' in the UK/Australia and 'broiling' in the US. It's complicated
      
      You can't use 'Creative Commons' as your source in images. You should link to the actual image source and cite the license in the caption. If it's from a site like Pixabay, use the copyright holder's name. More here:
      
      https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use
      
      Good luck.

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   Polo27posted 3 years ago

   Thanks
   I have edited and truncated most of my article.
   So now it is published ,though not the way I had intended.
   It is also not in featured category.
   I am missing something here, as the article was not promoting any particular brand ,which some other featured articles are.
   Thanks again
   Pankaj

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      theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Your Amazon capsule was promoting a specific product (brand of mix). I suggested you change it to text and use an inline link to Amazon

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         Polo27posted 3 years agoin reply to this

         I did that ,but still it was not approved.
         So I removed the reference to Amazon totally and resubmitted.
         The post has been published bow ,but it is not featured.
         I compared my post with the featured ones to try and improve.
         But I am missing something and my post remains unfeatured.
         Thanks again.
         Pankaj

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            theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Sometimes it takes several hours to become featured. Every time you edit it, it goes to the back of the queue. If it doesn't pass the Quality Assessment Process, you will get another email.
            
            You might like to try using the free Grammarly app to tidy up any grammatical errors.

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               Polo27posted 3 years agoin reply to this

               I have used Grammarly and the post is clear. The post is also a good ,easy to read article on Hemingway..

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                  theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                  There are still issues with unnecessary capitalization. When in the body of a sentence 'papad', 'tortilla', 'lentils', etc., should not begin with a capital letter.
                  
                  Also, "like chopped tomatoes, carrots, coriander,….with tomato chutney or ketchup as a sauce to dip in."
                  
                  Should be, 'like chopped tomatoes, carrots, and coriander with tomato chutney or ketchup as a sauce to dip in."
                  
                  A comma followed by four dots is not correct punctuation. When using dots/periods (ellipses), you only use three, and you wouldn't use them in that kind of sentence... you would use them thus.
                  
                  Subheadings should be in APA title case. Some of yours are and some aren't. Subheadings must be consistent.
                  
                  So there are still several errors that need fixing, although that shouldn't prevent the article being featured.
                  
                  Hope you get it through soon

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                     Polo27posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                     Hi
                     I deleted the old submission, created a new one. This time the file name was changed from  christmassnack to crunchy. Now it is published as a featured article. Pls check and comment.
                     Thanks for your support.

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                        theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                        Hi,
                        
                        Congrats
                        
                        You need to put a blank line in between paragraphs in the first text module. There should be a little 'white space' break up the text.
                        
                        A 'menagerie' is a disparate collection of animals, not snacks
                        
                        You need to talk about why that particular brand of papads is better than the rest - you are recommending it, so why? Use its actual name 'Lijjat Punjabi Indian Papad' as the anchor text. Otherwise, that link will be snipped by the editors when it is reviewed.
                        
                        Don't use periods/full stops at the end of subheadings.
                        
                        Otherwise, good work
                        
                        Edit: re the deep frying. It would be a good idea to mention that the oil needs to be very hot and to test it with a little piece of papadum to make sure, otherwise it doesn't expand and cooks very hard. You might also include a warning about being careful with this method as it's easy to get a burn from the hot oil. Ask me how I know

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                           Polo27posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                           Thanks for the advise.
                           I will do the necessary changes.
                           Also menagerie does refer to collection of wild animals ,but also sometimes totally different things.
                           I didn't want to talk about a brand because it could be rejected. It was getting tedious.
                           A relief that the post was cleared and I have submitted to delishably network. Hope it gets through.
                           Thanks again ,do comment and share my first post.
                           Pankaj

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