Second opinion please: Article is eligible to be moved

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   Kyler J Falkposted 5 years ago

   Alright, so my article is eligible to be moved and my spelling and grammar is not up to snuff as I can't find much to correct. Here is what the editor says about the article.
   
   -I would move the poll down. We want readers to gain some information before engaging in a poll. This helps readers stay on the page.
   
   -Can you do one more read-through for spelling and grammar errors? I would especially look for places where "its" should be "it's" and where there should be a comma.
   
   Your help is greatly appreciated!
   
   https://hubpages.com/health/What-Is-It- … y-Disorder

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      DrMark1961posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      You should add a reference/link capsule at the end of the article and include those sites you are linking too. They are good sources, but if someone goes and reads one of those articles they may not come back to your own site.
      I would also recommend you make the poll more meaningful. Your article is about what it is like living with someone with BPD, but the poll does not reflect that.
      I do not see any grammatical problems but there are many writers on here that might find something.

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         Kyler J Falkposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you, Doc, I will revisit the article with your suggestions in mind. As for your suggestion, however, could you clarify as to whether I should leave the in-line links or remove them and simply make a resource section at the end?

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      OldRosesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      My grammar is usually pretty good, but I don't see anything resembling what the editor is referring to.  Three changes that I would suggest:
      
      Last paragraph before the poll:
      
      "calloused" should be "callous"
      "damages" should be "damage"
      
      Last sentence:
      
      "could" should be "can"
      
      Hope that helps.

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         Kyler J Falkposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Changes made, and they definitely made it much more authoritative and direct. Thank you so much!
         
         I did remove in-line links, however, and moved it to a resource section, but now I feel like everything looks uncouth. Perhaps that is just my personal style feeling as if it is being infringed upon, though I do see the necessity of moving off-site links to the bottom whenever possible.

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            DrMark1961posted 5 years agoin reply to this

            All I can suggest is that you read the top traffic articles to the niche site to which you have submitted this. They have likely been edited by HP staff and are using the style that they want to follow. They want all of the articles to have a consistent look, which means Amazon links, not Amazon capsules, and a resource capsule, not links leading to sites off of the HP domain.

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               Kyler J Falkposted 5 years agoin reply to this

               I was a bit caught off guard, because I wrote that article more as a personal essay and the editors contacted me for it without submission. I'll go do that now, thank you.

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               Kyler J Falkposted 5 years agoin reply to this

               The first article I click on has a poll immediately after the first paragraph, hahaha! I feel like I'm in for a confusing, paradoxical time.

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                  DrMark1961posted 5 years agoin reply to this

                  Oh well, at least we can laugh about it.
                  I guess I should have said "MAYBE they want all of their articles to have a consistent look". Then again...

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   RoadMonkeyposted 5 years ago

   I only caught one spelling mistake
   Body dysmporphic

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      Kyler J Falkposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Oh goodness, I see now, the extra P my brain cycled out. Which section?

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      Kyler J Falkposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Found it with ctrl+f, thank you, thank you, thank you!

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