I'd like feedback on my article: Patent Ductus Arteriosus : Pediatric Heart...

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   Arshikasinghposted 2 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Patent Ductus Arteriosus : Pediatric Heart Defect

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   AliciaCposted 2 years ago

   Hi. I suggest that you first go through the article to correct the English errors. (Your bio shouldn’t contain English errors, either.) There shouldn’t be a space before a colon.
   
   Since your article will likely be read by members of the general public, adding additional definitions for the technical terms in the article would be helpful. You should think about what to put in the “Conclusion” again. Mentioning what you’ve said in the article and people have already read seems unnecessary.
   
   Writing the same title for a photo capsule and the following text capsule doesn’t look good. You need to use images with a commercial Creative Commons license or a public domain one.  Choosing pictures from Google isn’t appropriate unless they have the correct license. One of your images looks bad because the caption in the photo indicates that it’s copyrighted. The last image is watermarked.

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   theraggededgeposted 2 years ago

   Hi there, you haven't explained what the problem is in the introduction. You say it is functional, but what you don't mention is that it is not meant to be so. Most parents would think that 'functional' is a good thing.
   
   Also, it's 'acyanotic', not 'acynaotic'.
   
   Your article is very similar to others on the web, so somehow you have to make yours better than those. Maybe you can add in your personal experience as a nurse dealing with this problem in a newborn? Or perhaps you can give an actual example of such a case by interviewing the parent? Or even someone who had the problem and who is now grown up and healthy?
   
   Otherwise, people will turn to trusted medical sources and your article won't feature in search results.
   
   Here are the rules regarding legal image use: https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use
   
   Good luck.

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      Arshikasinghposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      thanks for your guidance ma'm

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