Feedback wanted-Check out my hub.

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   kcreeryposted 15 years ago

   I'm relatively new to HubPages and I wanted some feedback on my hub(s).  Is the presentation ok?  Can I add some capsules that are helpful?  Any advice would be great.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Active-Kids

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      Maddie Ruudposted 15 years agoin reply to this

      The hub is good, but I notice you've included some tags that don't have anything to do with the subject matter (such as "make money online").  Make sure all your tags accurately reflect the content of the hub, otherwise it will be unpublished for revision.
      
      You can "anchor" your links by going into the text capsule, highlighting the text you'd like to be clickable, and clicking the little chain icon to add the URL.  This will make the hub a little cleaner and improve the flow.  You may also want to try breaking up your text with some images or relevant YouTube videos to make it more visually appealing.
      
      It's an important subject.  Overall I think you did a good job tackling it.

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         kcreeryposted 15 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for the "anchor" tips.  I was wondering how people did that in their hubs.  I've edited my tags to keep them more relevant.

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      humagaiaposted 15 years agoin reply to this

      Just found this forum and since I have just asked for help here I thought it only right to take time trying to assist others. You are first.
      I did enjoy the read and it made me think back (a long way) to when my kids were that age. Unfortunately, unlike you, I made the mistake of not being as available to them as I should. Earning a living to keep 4 kids was a full, full time business. So  I am a bit confused by your heading 'Lead by Example'. A heading like this makes me expect content that is specifically following that tag. Although some of the following was about being with them on activities a lot was about enrolling them in activities.
      Either, it would be better structures if another heading was added for the enrolling bit - which I think would break the flow of your article, which is very personal.
      Or you think of a more appropriate title - something like 'Kids - their sporting life'.
      Good content, good phraseology. Pleasant style. It was good enough for me to want more. On that note is it possible to expand the content by another 100 words or so. That way I would not feel - oh that's the end. Perhaps a conclusion to round it all off would be an idea. Make it a good heading though.

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         kcreeryposted 15 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for that humagaia.  Some great pointers for me.  I do need to make it a bit longer. I'll change the heading for less confusion.

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