My First Hub

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   Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years ago

   Hi everyone,
   
   I joined up yesterday in order to post a Hub that I had been working on for a few days and I would appreciate it if someone could give me some feedback. http://hubpages.com/hub/Feral-Animals-o … -1-Rabbits
   
   I hope to write similar Hubs about other feral animals as well as Hubs based on my own personal experiences.
   
   I'm pretty happy with the layout but I would love some constructive criticism about my writing as I'm far from an experienced author. I often have decent ideas, but struggle with getting my sentences to sound right.
   
   My Google Adsense account is still pending but hopefully ads will appear soon.
   
   Thanks!

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      Marisa Wrightposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      Looks like a good start, welcome to HubPages!
      
      Once you get Adsense going, tick "this Hub may be considered commercial" and set ads to High.  Otherwise the ads won't appear.

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         Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years agoin reply to this

         Ooh thank you Marisa!
         I'll double check those settings now because I have a feeling I unticked it, thinking it only applied to sales hubs.

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      TheQuestionposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      i think the others caught the bulk of the spelling and grammatical errors
      still you have to be careful here
      if the monitors get the impression--mistaken or not--that you posted this to self-promote then they will bust you
      be careful and let me suggest something i no longer do here but still do with my paid writing:
      read your story aloud as if you are a reporter
      that's a great way to catch most mistakes
      know what i mean?

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         Website Examinerposted 12 years agoin reply to this

         This is a special forum for getting feedback, and every Hubber has the right to post links to their hubs here for that purpose. The Original Poster asked for constructive feedback, which is perfectly fine. I recommend you read the description for the forum.
         
         http://hubpages.com/forum/topic/7292

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      Simple Timposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      Great start! Spoony Galoony awesome name...I am a big fan of Beatrix Potter! But Looks like Peter Rabbit is up to no good!
      Here are two of my suggestions:
      1.    Apart from grammar I would say watch the layout of your page by that I mean Headings and Subheadings. Use Title Case Text for headings and sub headings.
      'The damage that rabbits do:' This would be far more appealing if it looked like a Title Damage Caused by Rabbits
      Headings would also give the article a logical structure rather than read as one piece of text.
      2.  Always give your images a title and ALWAYS reference your source of the image.
      
      Hope this helps.Tim

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         Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years agoin reply to this

         Ah yes, adding titles to the photos was something that I meant to ask about in the original post. How do I add captions under the image in small font? I tried to write it in the "title" section but that just put the caption above the image, in font bigger than the title!

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            Pcunixposted 12 years agoin reply to this

            Do it in the box that shows up after you load the image.  If you go back to edit, you'll see that near the bottom.

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            Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years agoin reply to this

            Oooh nevermind, apparently I'm blind because I went back into edit mode and there is clearly a box to type in a caption :-P My bad!

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               Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years agoin reply to this

               Sorry Pcunix, I must have found it just before you wrote that because I didn't see your reply. But thanks anyway!
               P.S. Your hubs are fantastic

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                  Pcunixposted 12 years agoin reply to this

                  Replies cross in the Internet.  Your electrons and mine flowing through at basically the same time. 
                  
                  I didn't notice that box until the first time I went back in to Edit either.

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   Website Examinerposted 12 years ago

   I agree with Marisa that you have done an excellent job.
   
   I noticed a few punctuation errors:
   - "A decline in rabbit numbers, may..." (remove comma);
   - " research organisations such as the CSIRO along with..." (add comma after CSIRO);
   "outside and the..." (add comma after "outside);
   "have shown however," (add comma before "however," or begin sentence with "However,");
   "...such as; using" (change semi-colon to colon).
   
   Grammatical error:
   - "It does nothing about growing numbers of the animals..." (change to: "...the growing number of animals...")
   
   Linguistic errors:
   - "because they were seen as inhumane because they caught..." ("because" repeated, find a different way);
   - "The rabbit haemorrhagic disease (RHD) was officially released in New South Wales has spread through the country..." (something is wrong here).
   
   Good luck.

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      Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      Wow thank you Website Examiner! I agree with all your suggestions and feel silly for not noticing them sooner

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   SteveoMcposted 12 years ago

   I think your hub is very well written.  I sometimes have a lot of trouble getting through some of the hubs that are posted here, but this one was compelling to read and I wanted to know more as I went along.   I thought to myself, "The flaw is not enough answers."   It turned out that you not only posed the right questions, you gave the right answers.   
   
   Good job!  I will want to read more of your hubs.
   
   Welcome to HubPages!

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      Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      Wow! I'm getting a big ego now hehehe. :-p could someone please tell me if adsense ads are being displayed on my hub? I turned it on in the edit settings, but I cant see them on my computer...

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         Website Examinerposted 12 years agoin reply to this

         You better get yourself an avatar to go with the ego. Yes, ads are shown on your hub, both textual and images.

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            Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years agoin reply to this

            Thank you

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   snagerriesposted 12 years ago

   All the very best for your first hub..

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   Info Bucketposted 12 years ago

   Heartily Welcome To Hubpages. Concentrate on writing and keep in touch.

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   askpowersposted 12 years ago

   Welcome to Hubpages.
   
   Your writings are your power of conveying message and information. So use it to prove yourself.
   
   Regards,

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   khmohsinposted 12 years ago

   You are Welcome here,
   Its great to hear that you are participating and willing to share knowledge with us.
   Best of Luck,Regards

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      Spoony Galoonyposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks for the feedback everyone

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