Give it to me straight doc...

  1. jdomingo profile image61
    jdomingoposted 7 years ago

    Here is my second hub after a few days and some critique from some friends and fellow hubbers I have taken some of their recommendations and tweaked it...let me know what you think...oh and Give it to me straight!

  2. WryLilt profile image86
    WryLiltposted 7 years ago

    1. Move the picture beside the second text capsule and make the first text capsule big enough to allow your adsense block to appear top right, prime real estate for clicks.
    2. "We might be thinking why did this happen I was the ONLY one in line!" maybe add the word 'when' or a comma.
    3. I feel a bit like I'm reading a textbook and was bogged down. Break it up using some of the following methods:
    -Put story examples in seperate paragraph and maybe highlight with bold or italics.
    -Add some dot point lists.

    Otherwise good job.

    1. jdomingo profile image61
      jdomingoposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      thanks a bunch WryLilt.  It was even less spread out than the original hub but I tweaked it and did split it up some.  I'm working on my 3rd hub at the moment and will take all this into consideration!