I have just published this hub and it has already been marked down.
Some constructive criticism would be appreciated please.
I just read it and it looks fine and reads well, except that you want to drop that comma from the first sentence. In actual fact you want to rewrite that first sentence to include the title.
The benefit of bread makers is waking up to the smell of freshly baked bread. This ensures you have a good start to the day.
Later on you say, 'its hard work' and 'its time consuming'. As 'its' in this case is a contraction of 'it is', you should have an apostrophe between the t and the s. It's.
Now you seem to be selling bread makers, but have not sent your reader anywhere? Have you not yet joined the Amazon affiliate program? Join and put some Amazon capsules in there for breadmakers.
Try and talk in US dollars, not pounds. Your main market is the US, not the UK. Leave it as pounds but put dollars in brackets if you can. You don't want to scare away US clients.
If you have a UK Amazon affiliate, you can insert two links to them in the body of the hub.
A photo or two wouldn't go amiss either.
Overall, it is certainly a good effort. Well done and welcome to Hubpages
Isn't the whole English speaking world our market? But I agree that the US dollar currency is a better choice for an international audience.
Definitely find some photos of delicious bread. If you want your readers to buy a bread maker, make sure you entice them with the tasty food they can create.
Why do you assume it was marked down? Or if it was, that it matters? I have had many hubs drop to 49 briefly and then climb rapidly.
Still wet behind the ears Pcunix and a little self confident about my written work.
I left a comment there, it needs something to spice it up, perhaps a few photos of bread-making or bakeries. Maybe a Youtube video showing bread being made. And put a few ads of interest there, like cookbook ads. If it climbs up the rating, it might earn you some money.
I'd break up the text into smaller paragraphs too, they will make it easier to read. I have written very texty or wordy hubs and it take a subject people are very interested in to sustain their attention. Try to think about what people might want to read rather than what you want to write about. Make it topical, if you have to. Thinking outside the box can pay dividends. Hope this helps.
It's a very popular subject, and yours is just one of many. You need to find a different slant on bread-making and how to save dough in the process.
If you want to earn a decent crust, you need to know how to mould your articles to the taste of your audience.
The paragraphs are far too long - thinner slices and bite size chunks are best.
Try $ as well as £ prices - the internet has an international flavour.
List the different makes and perhaps the type of breads you can and cannot produce
Also make a bakers dozen of the pros & cons of bread-making too.
That's my opinion only - you may knock me back if you wish or rise to the challenge ...
(excuse the puns - I couldn't help myself)
Hubs usually start at around a 50 rating and then move up over the next few days before they settle into an actual rating. So I don't really understand what you mean when you say it has been marked down.
Interesting point there "Isn't the whole English speaking world our market?"
On Hubpages, we can use Amazon.com...or....Amazon.com.
So what countries are actually served by Amazon.com? Canada, Australia? Where?
OK here in Spain I can buy from Amazon.com but not only will I get charged a lot in postage, I can't guarantee Spanish customs will let me keep the package without paying them more in taxes.
I've heard of that happening to others here. America is outwith the free trade allowed within the European Community (obviously!) so anything bought and brought in could be subject to import duties.
So what countries are actually served by Amazon.com, apart from the U.S.A?
According to their help page, they ship to almost the entire planet: http://www.amazon.com/gp/help/customer/ … eId=596184
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