Need a poem critiqued

  1. ZipperConstantine profile image80
    ZipperConstantineposted 6 years ago

    I wrote my first poem ever.  I would appreciate a critique from poet enthusiasts. I can take it--don't hold back!  It's called, "The Edge of Darkness."

    1. BaliMermaid profile image56
      BaliMermaidposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Well heck. Who hurt you so much?  I can feel someones pain (your's perhaps) when reading the poem.

      The title just about tells it all. You could say I felt the author at the edge of a balcony deciding if they should jump or not. The rest of the poem is the discussion the person on the edge is having with someone trying to bring them in off the edge.

      So powerful poem.  The technical aspects of poetry I cannot speak to.
      If you are the person that feels what the poem expresses, I hope you will be okay.

      We all have a reason to be here, sometimes it just takes a while to get to the end of the path that leads to understanding what that reason is.

      Good luck, bad luck, who knows should be a persons motto. And try making someone new happy every day, even if it's just with a smile.