Request for critique on short story...

  1. NatalieSack profile image61
    NatalieSackposted 5 years ago

    This is the first draft of my new short story.  Any constructive feedback would be appreciated!

    http://nataliesack.hubpages.com/hub/On-Your-Mark

    1. spectacled-bear profile image90
      spectacled-bearposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I replied to this thread as a comment in your hub...

 
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