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  1. Shrikrishnap profile image62
    Shrikrishnapposted 5 years ago

    Hi

    Dear Hubbers,

    This is my first hub. Please review & let me know how can I make it better for readers.

    http://shrikrishnap.hubpages.com/hub/Li … iful-1997#

    Thanks in advance
    Krishna

  2. Michael J Rapp profile image60
    Michael J Rappposted 5 years ago

    Hi!  First of all, your subject matter is very pleasant and you've expressed your thoughts wonderfully.  However, you really need to work on your grammar, form and punctuation in some places.  The overuse of elipsis (...) most notably.  You want a period or comma in most of those situations. Elipsis are to be used to indicate missing information.  I also saw "&" in the place of "and" at least once. Just some constructive criticism on how to make your hub more readable.

    Otherwise, a great topic and very nice read. I look foward to seeing more!

    1. Michael J Rapp profile image60
      Michael J Rappposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      Oops!  Elipses.  I need to work on my grammar too. :-)

    2. Shrikrishnap profile image62
      Shrikrishnapposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      Hi Michael
      Thanks for your reply smile Actually I wanted to write this hub as a poem, but the outcome was something else smile . But yes from now onward I will pay attention to Grammar smile & ask someone to proofread.
      Thanks

 
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