a poem

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   ekenney0002posted 15 years ago

   i pierce my lips shut
   so as not to wake my life.
   i close my eyes to see,
   and i breathe to exhale.
   the clicking of my dwindled heart
   beats with a shadow.
   shapes of words spill over my fingers,
   a fumbled interpretation marks the page.
   Frustration engrosses me...
   
   loves twists and turns
   as i toss aside.
   faulting to my core
   i fumble for the floor
   looking amongst my ruins,
   i entertain an unrealistic result.
   
   tip toe along the edge,
   as i flirt with the water
   peer into the surface to test
   my restraint..
   the hard chilling edge urges me onward...
   i slide my feet into the murky water,
   relish in the warm wrath of sin.
   heated from inner out, i fall.
   sliding through the textured liquid,
   my heart burns
   and our lips meet.
   
   logic screaming to leave
   my body remains.
   parting my lips to speak,
   they could not move.
   lifting my eyes to meet his
   my heart, pounding, would assume just burst,
   without the meager cage of guilt surrounding it.
   
   finding the ledge leading to the other side,
   i calm my raging heart,
   adding a complacent smile
   and poised composure.
   a smile to fool the world.
   smother the emotions
   that saturate me.
   sweetly, softly, i lie.
   torn between the deuces of great wealth...
   dizzy among the storm.
   
   i pierce my lips shut so as not to wake my life.
   i close my eyes to see,
   and i breathe to exhale.
   the clicking of my dwindled heart beats with a shadow.

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   Poppa Bluesposted 15 years ago

   Very nice ! I especially liked these lines:
   
   a smile to fool the world.
   smother the emotions
   that saturate me.
   sweetly, softly, i lie.
   
   The dual meaning of the word lie here struck me! Now something I wrote:
   
   Differences
   
   What makes us so different
   
   Yet draws us so near?
   
   Like gravity, the moon
   
   Pulls on the Earth and
   
   Earth's gravity pulls back.
   
   The force is subtle and unseen,
   
   Yet strong enough to keep
   
   Each in its place both separate
   
   Yet dependent on the other.
   
   Attraction!
   
   
   What makes us so different
   
   Yet drives us together?
   
   Like the winds of the storm
   
   Swirling in circles powered
   
   By differences of pressure.
   
   Invisible and unfelt,
   
   Fueled by the sea.
   
   It drives the water in waves
   
   Smashing against the shore.
   
   Desire!
   
   
   What makes us so different
   
   Yet compels us to touch?
   
   Like thunder clouds filled
   
   With negative charge.
   
   The land is positive, sure.
   
   It holds us captive while clouds
   
   Hover above drifting on wind.
   
   Each separate, but anxious to touch.
   
   Then the lightning leaps the distance,
   
   Sharp, and hard it fingers the land.
   
   Passion!
   
   
   What makes us so different
   
   Yet we are the same?
   
   Man with his muscular body,
   
   Designed to hide his insecurity.
   
   Confidently moving towards his mate.
   
   Woman with soft curves that
   
   Belies her strength, her power.
   
   Signals her acceptance.
   
   Her control complete,
   
   As bodies collide,
   
   And generate heat.
   
   Love!

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   ekenney0002posted 15 years ago

   i like it a lot, i often have trouble trying to write about love... well happy love haha. but i like your alot, i think it is very descriptive and colorful.

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   logowhizposted 15 years ago

   on the "differences":
   
   i love this poem simply because i can see the passion, the emotion and the thrill of making love. sex is, well, love! :-)

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