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   OhMeposted 6 years ago

   This article is unfeatured but something is different.  I am able to share other articles that are unfeatured but with this one, I get "not available".  What makes the difference?  Not sure you will be able to open but here is the link.
   https://hubpages.com/education/pendleton-memory-garden

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

   One thing that you must do is to remove all of that boldface from your article. HubPages does not like lots of characters in boldface. You have a virtual editor in your manuscript software that is located in the upper right corner of the page that you are working on. You should have received warnings from the virtual editor to reduce the amount of boldface in your article. (The warning will not go away either until you correct the problem.) HubPages probably has an algorithm as to what percentage of characters can be in boldface. I do not know what the percentage is, but I know from experience that it is very low. Use boldface very sparingly. Yes, I have received my share of warnings about too many boldface characters in my articles.

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      OhMeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you.  I removed all the bold face.  I really hadn't noticed that.  Thanks a lot for bringing it to my attention.  I did not receive any warnings.

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      OhMeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      When I try to share on FaceBook, it comes up as "page not found".  Any ideas why?

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         OhMeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         This is what I see when I use the Facebook Share on this article
         
         
         

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

   I also noticed that some of your paragraphs are much too long. You need to break the long paragraphs into smaller components for your readers’ benefit.

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      OhMeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks.  Working on it.  I write like I talk, I guess.

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

   You wrote:
   
   “Thank youI really love this school because I was a student here in the 50's, I taught here in the 70's, Our son and daughter were students were students here in the 70's and 80's and our grandson was a student here from 2004-2010.”
   
   This is a run-on sentence that needs to be corrected.

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      OhMeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Corrected.  Thanks.

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

   You must always insert a space between a period and the first character of the following sentence. I saw this problem numerous times in your article.
   
   I also noticed a number of other run-on sentences in your article in addition to the one that I specifically pointed out to you above. These need to be corrected.

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      OhMeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      The space problem happened when it came over from Squidoo.  It doesn't show up in "edit" but I have noticed it, too, when viewing without signing in.  I will see what I can do.  Thanks a lot.

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

   You have inserted section headings throughout your article which might too long. The section headings that I use in my hubs all have clear, complete, and concise language. In other words, I don’t get too wordy. (I learned in Rhetoric & Composition years ago to “get to the point.”)
   
   You need to be consistent with the capitalization of words in your section headings. Some of your words are capitalized while others are not. All of the words in your section headings should be capitalized with the exception of definite and indefinite articles, conjunctions, and prepositions. The only exception to this is when the definite or indefinite article, conjunction, or preposition is the first word of a heading.

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      OhMeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks.  I will definitely work on the section headings

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

   You wrote:
   
   “This was a morning to Remember!”
   
   The “r” in “Remember” should be in lower case.

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

   You wrote:
   
   “The Memory Garden was chosen as a project that would do this as well as be used for Educational Purposes and enhance the school atmosphere.”
   
   Since I have made the corrections, his is how it should read:
   
   The Memory Garden was chosen as a project that would do this as well as to be used for educational purposes and to enhance the school atmosphere.

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

   You wrote:
   
   “Pendleton Elementary School is one of 4 elementary schools in Anderson County School District 4.”
   
   When numbers are used as adjectives, numbers 1-9 should be spelled out, as in one, two, three, etc.
   
   On the other hand, you can keep “Anderson County School District 4.” exactly as it is, since “4” is not functioning as an adjective.

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    Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

    You wrote:
    
    “I really love this school because I was a student here in the 50's. I taught here in the 70's.”
    
    Just a reminder that “I” is still in boldface.

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    Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

    You wrote:
    
    “Sue works extremely hard on the Memory Garden and enjoys teaching children about plant and animal life in Pendleton SC. I love her blog and hope you took time to visit it.”
    
    Please insert a comma between Pendleton and SC.

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    Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

    In the passage:
    
    Faculty members shared personal recollections of Ms. Baker and Ms. Peebles, illustrating their exemplary creativity and devotion to both students and fellow teachers."They truly understood that students are the flowers and teachers are the gardeners", said Tracie Sweet, a first grade teacher at Pendleton Elementary.
    
    After the word gardeners, please put the comma before the quotation mark.

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    Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

    You wrote:
    
    “Starting the school garden club was one of the goals of the original group that organized the school garden. It is wonderful to see that it actually happened. I know the children must be enjoying it and learning a lot. I feel like the Memory Garden will benefit them for the rest of their lives.”
    
    You need to remove the short, choppy sentences.

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    Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

    You wrote:
    
    “The Pendleton Elementary School Memory Garden is still very much a "work in progress" but has come a long way from it's beginnings.”
    
    Change it’s to its. It’s is an abbreviation for “it is.” “Its” is a possessive pronoun.

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    Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

    You wrote:
    
    “Corey Watson, a parent volunteer and Landscape Designer took these”
    
    Please insert a comma after the word designer. In addition, “landscape designer” should be in lower-case letters, just as I wrote it.

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    Gregory DeVictorposted 6 years ago

    Sometimes you spell out South Carolina and other times you use the abbreviation SC. Please be consistent with whatever option you choose.

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       OhMeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

       Thanks. I think I corrected all of these unless I had already deleted that particular sentence.  Did you happen to see the screenshot above of what I am seeing when I try to share to Facebook?

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