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Crown of Thorns (symbology of thoughts)

Updated on April 23, 2013

Crown of thorns upon my head

Cutting thoughts, a mire of dread

Blood dripping, shards of glass

Endures the one who wears a mask


The heart enjoys no filter

Venom leaks, toxins burn

Gazing inward

Bruised, tired, spent.


Winds of time

Change like moods

Breath in

Breath out

Hold

Dead time



Begin again





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    • Jewels profile image
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      Jewels 6 years ago from Australia

      Thanks for your visit Twilight Lawns and I appreciate your feedback.

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      Twilight Lawns 6 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

      Jewels, for what it's worth, I think your poem has impact and what else does one want from artistic writing? If someone of limited writing ability makes a negative comment, or whether the ability is out of the ordinary, the impact remains the same. Poetry is personal and to be able to relay personal thoughts so clearly makes us what we are.

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      Micky Dee 6 years ago

      Take off those thorns my Dear! I think you're free! Great write! I may have that dejavoodoo stuff. I read this before. Great read again! Thank you Ma'am!

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      Cecilia 6 years ago from New York

      Oh...really good. wish i knew which troll.

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      Mark Knowles 6 years ago

      LOL Hanging out has got to be the best Christian ever. I won't comment on the poetry other than to say I liked it but am incapable of appreciating poetry. 195 hits for a poem sounds like a lot to me too.

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      Sufidreamer 6 years ago from Sparti, Greece

      Nice poem, Julie

      As for the troll - how anybody with so little writing talent can criticise the work of others is beyond me.

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      Jewels 6 years ago from Australia

      Thanks guys. I've never worried about the scores on my poems,the feedback has been great. The troll's visit was disturbing, then again IT is disturbed.

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      Cagsil 6 years ago from USA or America

      Hey Jewels, good job on the poem. The snide remark from the person who choose to call your poem "crap" apparently has a limited mind. I'll agree with Lady Guinevere on the little minds aspect. LOL! As for the score? They always fluctuate anyways. I've some poems in the high 80's and some in the low 70's. It depends on what people want to read. Keep up the good work writing. :)

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      Debra Allen 6 years ago from West By God

      Snide people have little minds. LOL Hi Jewels. I like you poem. It has deep feelings in it.

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      Susan Keeping 6 years ago from Kitchener, Ontario

      I like it...scores don't matter at all... any poems I've written have stayed in the 50s. Two people who I think are among the best poets (Ralwus and Brenda) on Hubpages like it, that is what should count.

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      Jewels 6 years ago from Australia

      Hanging out, the first visit you've made on my work and you leave this snide remark. This poem has had 195 hits - for poetry this is pretty good. Plus 30 comments so I'm not complaining. As a general observation poetry doesn't get high scores. But I doubt you were here to make constructive criticism. My observation is that you are troubled by your own Crown of Thorns, perhaps work on that!

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      hanging out 6 years ago

      crappy poem with a score of 58 you might be prospered to remove it lol

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      Jewels 7 years ago from Australia

      And Winsome, love that quote. May I quote you?

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      Jewels 7 years ago from Australia

      Definitely not a dullard. Spot on :) Pain and anquish created by incessant heavy thoughts. The symbology of a crown of thorns is exactly the heavy mire of the astrality (thoughts and emotions) of ones own circumstances and how they impact on us, and as you said - the will to push through regardless. Begin again.

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      Traqqer 7 years ago from Atlanta, GA

      I'd be lying if I said I understood what the poem was saying. But the feelings that I get are ones of pain and anguish followed by understanding and a will to get back into the fight. Is that anywhere close?....or am I a dullard?

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      Winsome 7 years ago from Southern California by way of Texas

      Aye there's the rub...The good news is we have this great capacity for thought--the bad news--we have this great capacity for thought. Thank you for sharing yours. =:)

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      Jewels 7 years ago from Australia

      Thank you prasetio30, appreciate your comments.

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      prasetio30 7 years ago from malang-indonesia

      nice poem. Simple but contain deep meaning.

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      Jewels 7 years ago from Australia

      Thanks Timothy, it means the heart is not protected from hurt and the hurt comes from the incessant negative thoughts that pound our being, our own thoughts of our lack of worth for eg.

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      Timothy Donnelly 7 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Well written piece Jewels; it struck me right away. I had to wonder about the heart which enjoys no filter, but tell me, is this because the first rational which allowed entry disagreed with the more scrupulous examination, perhaps in hindsight? I love it though, it is very real and personal, yet one that the reader can also personalize. Thanks.

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      Jewels 7 years ago from Australia

      Pleased you came to visit Stan. Circular and incessant thoughts - arggg! Needs constant detachment and sheer will on my part.

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      Stan Fletcher 7 years ago from Nashville, TN

      Glad I found you. Or that you found me through Shadesbreath. I will be checking out MFB also. Your poem, and his comment, struck a nerve. I'm 'nailed on a crossroad' at the moment. The battle to win control of one's thoughts seems to never end.

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      Jewels 8 years ago from Australia

      MFB III, considering the caliber of your writing, I'm honored you came. A wise man once told me, it was not the intent that we suffer, so choose a different way.

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      MFB III 8 years ago from United States

      Far too often we nail ourselves upon a crossroad, splayed between choices that stretch our very soul. We hang there indecisive, torn by the thorns of despair. Great write/hub

      makes me want to seek out less painful directions in my journeys through life.~~MFB III

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      Jewels 8 years ago from Australia

      Thanks Rebecca, appreciate your comment.

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      Rebecca E. 8 years ago from Canada

      This is an amazing piece of poetry, well written.

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      Jewels 8 years ago from Australia

      The toughest battle there is. Thanks Jess.

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      Jess Killmenow 8 years ago from Nowheresville, Eastern United States

      One's own mind can be a formidable adversary. Excellent poem.

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      Jewels 8 years ago from Australia

      Thanks BC and Brenda, appreciate the visit.

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      \Brenda Scully 8 years ago

      i really enjoyed that.... i appreciate good poetry

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      Jewels 8 years ago from Australia

      Hi G-Ma, thanks for skipping in. Always good to see you.

      Hey Pam, it can be ouch. Fact is I'm feeling fantastic and I was inspired to write this from previous experiences. I know you you know.

      Thanks Ixxy. The good, bad and ugly makes us stronger. Deeper one goes, the more light in the end.

      Christoph - I can feel the love and am looking forward.

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      Christoph Reilly 8 years ago from St. Louis

      Sometimes we must all "begin again." May your journey be a happy one!

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      lxxy 8 years ago from Beneath, Between, Beyond

      Beautiful poem Jewels...despite the contents..good luck in feeling stronger.

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      pgrundy 8 years ago

      Ouch! Well I'm glad you can express it. I know that always helps me... sort of. Thank you Jewels.

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      Merle Ann Johnson 8 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

      Yes indeed, but is the way and the light that we must all go through to find our way...Nicely done my dear...:O) Hugs

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      Jewels 8 years ago from Australia

      Russ, a lovely thing to say. Humbled.

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      Russ Baleson 8 years ago from Sandhurst, United Kingdom

      Cutting thoughts indeed. It takes great skill to say so much in a short poem.

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      Jewels 8 years ago from Australia

      Breath in, breath out. I do sometimes wonder if people see the symbology of the crown of thorns relating to thoughts?

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      ralwus 8 years ago

      I thought so. Well, I have been there too many times. We humans must endure so much at times, but then I have such good friends to help me through like you.

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      Jewels 8 years ago from Australia

      The cursed mind ralwus. It has to be trained and molded so it can do no more harm. Tis life itself that can crucify, as you know. I wish you well also friend.

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      ralwus 8 years ago

      Oh my. Who has crucified you dear Jewels? Who has done this terrible painful thing to you? I wish you well my friend.