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Short Story: Daddy's Love . Part (3) The Shock!

Updated on March 9, 2014

The Surprise!

After several minutes of knocking on the door, he started having flashbacks of what happened to his wife several years ago, when she had found out, that her sons were dead . So he rushed down the stars to the car, and grabbed his keys , and ran back up again to the door. He knew which keys it was pretty well , but after all that was going through his mind , his concentration,was zero. After all he was only living in that same house, for twenty six years.

He became extremely nervous, but the third key worked, and he bolted through the door , then started shouting his wife's name, Catherine , Catherine where are you , as he listened for any sound, all he heard was the sound of the television upstairs and that’s where he headed and kept shouting Catherine.

He quickly opened their bedroom door, and no sooner it stopped ant something soft, it was his wife, he saw her hands lying across the carpet on the floor. He then squeezes his way through the door and kept speaking Catherine, Catherine, he felt for a pulse, and there it was, quite faint but he felt it.


He grabbed the house phone and quickly dialed 911 and shouted out to God ! Why me oh lord! Before he could say another word, the 911 operator kept saying hello, hello he was hearing, but during all that was going on he was hearing the news on the television, at one time the reporter said , they did not find the girl , but her kidnappers were somehow mysteriously both dead. HE saw that same red car that he was following , but nothing was confirmed about his angel, and he just went into shock.

Confused and almost in some other world he sat there with the phone in hand, but he could not move, nor speak , he hears voices downstairs saying this is the police is anyone at home. The 911 operator had already called the police and gave them the address, she stayed on both calls and told the police that she heard a television on.

They also heard the television and went to the direction of the sound, saying police anyone home? As they pushed the door a little more they saw the woman, that was Catherine on the floor and her husband in a daze by the telephone close to the TV. The operator was still on the husbands phone and was ordered to send the ambulance, two people down ,

They checked Catherine ‘s pulse , it was faint, and the other officer checked the husband, it was strong but he was in a shock of some kind. The officers did what they could on the scene awaiting the arrival of the ambulance.

The Shock!

To be cont…….to part (4)

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    • Sky9106 profile image
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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Thanks very much Rose as I told you , it's quite encouraging to me when I read the words of folks like you, because I know a little about the dept of those who have clearly shown their true colors.

      Greatly appreciated.

      God Bless.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and your on a roll! Keep up the great work. I can hardly wait to find our what happens next.

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      I know her , and I am happy to join forces with her , she once left me quite an encouraging comment.

      Well we forgive you , because we know the delay was dew to something powerful. And you will eventually succeed , don't let is get the hold too tight, because that's where it takes you, more work for more pay and no more you.

      The dream always pays ,more than you can use and you got it .

      Cross the hurdles though . Your promise will tell.

      Bless.

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      Carolee Samuda 5 years ago from Jamaica

      Hi Sky, I have been mighty busy. I promise a few more chapters on the weekend. I need to make some money so that's the reason for the delay. I promise you will have your story over the weekend....lol. I know one other person who is cussing me off now. My special visitor who loves my short stories. She is not a member but she follows every story I write.

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      It's the truth so don't drop me off now , it sounds like you are dropping me off. lol. I know that you are mighty busy , because this is where I believe your calling is the most loud. Sincere thanks for all you have and will continue to I know you obey Give and it shall be given onto you. Ask and you shall receive.

      I await your next chapter , where is it? I will again look.

      Thanks for all your great help and support and I will say again we may take different routes but we are on the same journey.Glad you like.

      Give thanks and praises praises.

      Bless.

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      Carolee Samuda 5 years ago from Jamaica

      You are getting really good at this my friend...I taught you well...lol...just kidding. This is your first "real" story and it is going well.

      Next we get some dialogue in there and you have a hit!

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      Elenin 5 years ago from So Cal

      Oh yeah, I read parts 1 and 2, then I reread 3, then I listened to the link you posted; Lucky Dube’s ‘You Stand Alone’ and went off into a YouTube frenzy. Shades of Jimmy Cliff, tones of Peter Tosh, Lucky was awesome,,, and I never heard of him till today, after he’s dead and gone...

      I usually hold back from commenting when a writer is in the process. Don’t want to throw them off, especially if I enjoy where they are going. But I am here now so I offer some of the prolific Lucky’s words in hope that they might aid you some way;

      You Stand Alone

      Liar, liar, your pants are on fire

      You' ve got a nose as long as a telephone wire

      I swear to tell the truth. Nothing but the truth. So help me GodI

      cross my heart and hope to die

      These are the words we use. To get out of situations

      Then I wonder why

      We don' t mean what we say

      Then I remembered the terrible truth About the truth

      Chorus:If you stand for the truth

      You will always stand alone

      The holy book tells us

      The truth will set us free

      But in this world I know different

      Do you believe in the truth?Do you believe in righteousness? Do you believe in innocent Till proven guilty?

      'Cause those that tell the truth Are always on the run...Oh God

      Then I wonder why We don' t mean what we say? Then I remembered the terrible truth About the truth

      Chorus; If you stand for the truth

      You will always stand alone

      Till You Lose It All

      We take a lot of things for granted

      One day it' ll be taken away

      That' s when you' ll realize

      How important it was

      You never miss your water

      Till your well runs dry

      Give thanks and praise all the time

      The wolf is always by the door

      Chorus:

      You don' t know what you' ve got

      Till you lose it all again

      You never miss your water

      Till your well runs dry

      He' s a hero, now that he' s dead

      Oh what a bull preacherman talks about him

      When he was alive

      He didn' t even know his name

      When he was alive

      He didn' t get this love

      You never miss your water

      Till your well runs dry

      Chorus:

      Till you lose it again

      You never lose your water

      Till your well runs dry

      Big Boys Don’t Cry

      If we both believe in Reincarnation,

      Maybe we will have a

      Chance in the next life.

      You felt something for me

      And I was so deeply in love with you.

      But we both said nothing

      Till we ran out of time

      Sometimes I cry,

      I said I cry

      And it's not because of the pain I feel inside

      And it's not because of the hurt I feel inside

      But I cry,

      I said I cry

      Sometimes I cry

      And I remember the days

      When love was so far away from me,

      The only time I knew about love was

      When mommy and daddy told me they loved me,

      And I Didn't know that today it would be

      Me having got to say I love you

      But I remember that

      Chorus

      Big boys don't cry

      And sometimes

      I cry

      I said I cry.

      And it's not because of the pain I feel inside

      And it's not because of the hurt I feel inside

      But I cry

      I see your beautiful face

      Everytime I close my eyes,

      You reach out for me I reach out for you

      But in real life we cannot meet Oh!!!!!

      That is why I cry,

      I said I cry

      And it's not because of the pain I feel inside

      And it's not because of the hurt I feel inside

      But I cry

      And I remember the days

      When love was so far away from me,

      The only time I heard about love was

      When mommy and daddy told me they loved me,

      And I didn't know that today it would be

      Me having got to say I love you,

      But I remember that

      Chorus till fade...

      Thanks for exposing me to a great artist. If you feel this comment is in anyway inappropriate, remove it, no hard feelings, no worries, just wanted to share. Peace

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Sorry Elenin, don't know if you saw part one and two , hope you did. the links are above. Bless.

    • Sky9106 profile image
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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Than you Elenin, greatly appreciated and very encouraging. I am always open , because I write so that you may suggest something.

      Burt even a wonder is quite encouraging . I am on it. lol.

      Sincere thanks.

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      Elenin 5 years ago from So Cal

      Roll with it man. Rated Up and across except for funny of course. Very interested to see where you will be led.