Hope is Lost (A Poem)
Your reaching believing that untold dreams do come true
your pouting doubting scared and turning blue
your hurt your pain no sun just rain coming down on your parade
you can't go forward you must go back that's where safe is at
your use to comfort not challenge being at ease not unbalanced
its something new im telling you
why go back to doing things you never use to do
Hope is Lost
Your addiction has hindered your mind your body your time
think of it now as countless days pass by you try you cry
your tears are looked upon as disgust no one cares no one you can trust
everyone has turned their back you used them that is whats sad
Hope is Lost
Look at the lights shining the children playing people praying
your dreams are now mere images of what could be and what never will be
why have your dreams surpassed weren't they suppose to last until you made
it graduating from that class
you chose a bad way tis what they say to see a destiny that wasn't meant for thee
Hope is Lost
your use to this way overwhelming medication intakes your addicted now
along with the show your drinking the fire liquid now
everything is a swirl your heading downhill
reaching out the window for a dream that was never near
Hope is Lost
Here below are some other poems that I've written:
- My Precious Love (A Story About My Mother)
This is just a sample of how much you mean to me.
- Endless Time
Its like a revolving door that will never stop spinning.
Comments
Although I would only change this poem in the formatting. such as different spacing and line breaks.. I like your poem . it is very hard to tell someone to change their work . But in order to be a better writer you have to learn to take criticism. Your poem is great... but it would be better if you just change the way you format it.
Michael
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@cleaner3
I appreciate your criticism and thanks for the tip I shall go in when I have time and change the formatting
Thank you for pitting forth your thoughts via this well written poem.
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@mhatter99 I appreciate your feedback and for liking my poem.
Emotionally expressive poem. It's so hard when it seems there is no more hope.
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@Gypsy Im glad that you liked my poem and you took the time out of your day to read it. It really does mean alot to me.
Emotional poetry, hope is a precious commodity..Thank you...
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@alwaysexploring Im glad that you liked my hub and that you were able to understand my overall meaning of the poem
Through hope and hard labor anything really is possible, but one must want it.
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@aviannovice I agree and feel the same as you do
torrilynn. You lovely poem leaves me sad. There is always hope. Well done.
Graham.
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@Graham thanks for commenting and Im glad you liked my poem
Very sad, makes me wonder if these are my daughters feelings!
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@wildove5 thanks for your feedback
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