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I Woke Up Dancing - poetry

Updated on March 6, 2013
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I woke up
with thoughts
of you
in my bed
of me
in your arms
Lost
in your eyes
Found
in your gaze

Moving
Together
You
and me
Dancing
Sultry beat
Strong
Holding on
to you
Holding me

Dancing
Together
Muscles
Quivering
Taught
Glistening
Sweat
Deliberate steps
Perfect form
You with me

You lead
Me
Following
You
Taking me
On a journey
Lost
with you
Found
in me

We begin
to sing
Rhythm quickens
Passion building
Reaching
Crescendo
Dancing
With you
Dancing
In me

Holding me
Partners
Collapse
Music fades
Diminuendo
Finale
Me in
Your arms
You
Around me

I woke up
With thoughts
Of you
In my bed
Dancing
With Me
Lost
With you
Found
In me

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      Nithya Venkat 4 years ago from Dubai

      Awesome, passionate words - a beautiful poem with words dancing passionately through every line.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Vellur - thank you for the speedy comment. i am still unsure of myself when writing this sort of poem. all i know is what moves me, and sounds good to me, i am happy it was good for you too :)

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      David Stillwell 4 years ago from Sacramento, California

      awesome... you have a way with words

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      DAVEN! nice to see you here. I am glad you like this. Guess I am finally getting good at this :)

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Oo la la. Dance on fair maiden. Dance on. Thank you

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Mhatter99 - oh no, thank YOU! Always a pleasure to write for you.....I am off to bed. wonder what I will wake up thinking about tomorrow! :)

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from Lost...In Video Games

      This was awesome, if I may say so! This kind of gets me thinking about the passion between two of my characters in my "Dangerous Romance" series. This also makes me want to write a continuation to my short story "A Beautiful Dreamer" in which an incubus seduces a young woman in her sleep. Now imagine that kind of relationship...LOL! Beautiful work!

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      diogenes 4 years ago from UK and Mexico

      Lovely! Hot! Brings it all back!

      Bob

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      Live To Write 4 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

      Absolutely beautiful Dana... Wow!!!

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      Mark G Weller 4 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

      A beautiful expression of passion and spiritual connection!

      Mark

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Wow, Dana, this is awesome!! So romantic and passionate ..... Beautifully worded. Really enjoyed it, voting ++

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      Fullerman5000 4 years ago from Louisiana, USA

      Such good flow as if the poem was dancing. Great work. I enjoyed this very much. Voted up and beautiful.

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      Very sensual. A welcome escape. I gotta stop reading these. I'm never gonna get anything done... hahaha.

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      Martie Coetser 4 years ago from South Africa

      Love the rhythm.... Sexy!

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      This is beautifully done. Brilliant!

      Voting up and more.

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      Rev Bruce S Noll HMN 4 years ago from Asheville NC

      Wow Dana! Tssssssssssss!

      Very sensual and so well expressed! Bravo!

      Do it again!

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      Michelle Liew 4 years ago from Singapore

      Heartfelt, Dana. Great poetry!! I sense the passion! Sharing!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      writinglover - thank you! i am so honored that i could inspire you to continue your story. i really hope you do. i will be by to check out some of your work..... see you around. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Bob - glad to bring it back. but, where did it go!?! who am I to talk, it's been too long even for me since i have had anything that good..... always good to hear from you :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Thank you LAURINZO. Those few words speak volumes to me

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Mark - it is so wonderful to see you!!! i am so pleased that you felt what i intended... please take care. wishing you well.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      LaThing - Happy to see you stopping by another one of my poems. Even happier that you enjoyed it so much. Hope I can keep it up.... thanks a bunch for the vote up.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Fullerman5000 - I am so pleased to get such a great comment from a longstanding hubpages member. I struggled a little with this one, still not sure I got it quite right, but I guess I got it great and I'll certainly take that. Hope I can continue to impress..... also, nice to meet you. I will check out your work.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Moms-Secret - I laugehed when I read your commet! I know just what you mean, I think to myself if I don't stop writing these I am never gonna get anything done! So glad to give you a bit of an escape. Goodness knows we can all use it now and then. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      tobusiness - nice to see you again. thanks for the votes. i am thrilled you like it. i sort of wrote this on a whim for me, and said to myself - maybe people will ike it, maybe not. i guess you do! :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Born2care2001 - Wow! Thanks! Do it again?! I can sure try. I hope I dont disappoint!... see you around!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Michelle - thank you so much for sharing! This did come from the heart. It was inspired by my feelings for someone. I write it for myself (and him) not knowing if anyone would even like it. I am so glad my fussing and fretting over the words paid off. The next one should be even better!

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

      You used repitition very skillfully in this poem. This was a great love poem with very memorable moments. Jamie

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Jamie!!! So very excited to see you here. I am beyond thrilled by your comment. I am struggling with getting this sort of poem just right, so to know what works in it is so very helpful. A fellow hubber actually reccomendd I read your work to see how it is done. And of course I will. I love your work, so aside from enjoying it, I think i will study it too..... So glad you enjoyed this. I love to write poetry, knowing it is enjoyed means so much to me.

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      Christina M. Castro 4 years ago from Baltimore,MD USA

      This is quite beautiful Dana, and I enjoyed the rhythm and flow of it.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      CMCastro - thank you so much for you comment. i really enjoy knowing just what my hubber friends think/like. it helps me get better and better. when i become a rich and famous poet (hahaha!) i will thank you all - or maybe i will leave it as my epitaph and when i am a dead famous poet (seem to be more common) the world can read my thanks :)

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      Christy Birmingham 4 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      What a romantic poem Dana! Keep up the writing (and the smiles!)

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      Dianna Mendez 4 years ago

      The romance in this poem is beautiful and lovely. I love the "dream" that becomes a reality in this person's life.

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      Karen Silverman 4 years ago

      Ummmm...i'm thinkin' this isn't about music and dancing, Dana?

      Eh? wink,wink...

      Dana, this was absolutely breathtaking! You go girl - clearly - you're a wonderful choreographer!

      All i can add is - keep singing, my friend...haha..

      up and sharing..posting on my fb page - i love it!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      ChristyWrites - Thanks twin. Will do - write and smile both :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      teaches 12345 - glad you like this. i have had many such a dream. still waiting for the reality!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      ImKarn23 - I can't get anything past you, can I, Leslie. You are one briliant woman. Or is it that we share the same, um, interests? :)

      I am so thrilled that you like this so much! I am trying like heck to get good at this poetry stuff. My biggest fear is to write things that are bland - I think bland is worse than bad! So far so good I hope..... :)

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      ALUR 4 years ago from USA

      Love it. Glad I happened upon your writing. I often use dancing and lyrical expressions in my writing. Voted up!

      Thanks

      You're welcome to visit/rate my hubs as well:)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      ALUR - Thank you very much. I am lad you found me too. I will be by to read some of your work. :)

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Wow! This has the rhythm of life and the beat of racing hearts in throes of passion. Great!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      xstatic- what a great compliment! i write for the feel of the words just as much as i write for meaning. i am so gald you liked it.

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      Braydon Moore 4 years ago from Canada

      Wow ! Great and beautiful poetry Dana and i can't explain what i felt when i was reading your poetry ! So thanks Dana.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and beautiful. Sounds wonderful to wake up dancing. I love that song by Bruce Springsteen. Passing this on.

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      Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

      loved it...sensual yet delicate.

      voted up as awesome!

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      Victoria Lynn 4 years ago from Arkansas, USA

      Good one! Great rhythm to get caught up in. Very sensual. Way to go!

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      Denise Handlon 4 years ago from North Carolina

      That must have been some dream, Dana! Wonderful poem,thanks for sharing. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      braydonmoore - Thank is one of the best things about poetry, the feelings. A gret poem can take you a hundred places all at once.... Welcome to hubpages, I hope you are enjoying it here.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Gypsy Rose Lee - I could listen to that song on a loop for days. I do;t know why, but it just seems to fit the feeling.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Ruchira - Thank you so very much for the beautiful comment and for voting.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Victoria Lynn - This is definitely the sort of rhythm we should all get caught up in once and a while. So glad you paid a visit and enjoyed it.... I still am shaking my head at these comments. My best poems are always such a surprise. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Denise - I really did wake up to this as a daydream. Wonderful indeed. Unfortunately I think I squashed the chance of making it a reality. I do much better with words than I do with life..... Maybe next time!

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      Mike Pugh 4 years ago from New York City

      This is beautiful poetry Dana, so filled with passion for your partner or lover. I love the style of slender worded lines too, and imagery nicely written.

      Brings back memories of some moments I've had with my wife, an even when I was young. Thumbs up and sharing.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      CloudExplorer - This was inspired by a daydream of a would be lover. And what a daydream it was! I am happy to know that I was able to convey the emotions with my words, and to bring back some pleasant memories of yours....

      Thank you so much for sharing.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Dana I love how you did this poem amazing..

      very inspiring.. I want to try my hand at this style.

      thank you

      sharing to the world

      Debbie

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Deborah Brooks - this came from some great inspiration. i will keep those details to myself lest i be banished from the hubs for adult content!!!

      I like writing in this style - whatever it is. shame on me, i just write without conern for proper style. i know what i feel and i know how it sounds, and that is what i focus on.... you really should try something like this. Share it wish me when you do.

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      Karen Silverman 4 years ago

      i feel like dancing...DANCING!'...lol..

      sharing, my friend! (pantpant...)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      ImKarn23 - you really do leave the best comments! I am a big fan of dance! On the dance floor I have white folks rythm and too left feet. As for the other kind of dancing.... ;)

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      schoolgirlforreal 4 years ago from USA

      Funny I've had a similar dream..nice to see you being open about your feelings...and yummy!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      schoolgirlforreal - hahaha! i love your comment. i think a lot of girls have had this dream. for a lucky few it even comes true! now THAT is yummy! :)

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      What a way to wake up, or go to sleep for that matter. Such wonderful thoughts and desire leading to....

      This was great Dana. Loved it from start to finish.

      Voted up and awesome.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      tillsontitan - I agree. A truly great way to wake up, or go to bed, or... So pleased you enjoyed it... thank you for the votes.

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      Christina M. Castro 4 years ago from Baltimore,MD USA

      Had to read this again. Beautiful always, Dana!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      CMCastro - Hi Tina! thanks for the repeat visit. glad you still ike it :)

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      Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California)

      Dana,

      The more poetry you write, the better your poems get!

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      Cynthia Calhoun 4 years ago from Western NC

      This is beautiful, Dana. I love the repetition and rhythm and wonderful words. :)

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      bizarrett81 4 years ago from Maine

      How very beautiful, passionate, and romantic... voted up!

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Wow, Dana! Absolutely beautiful, sensual poem. I'm not sure if I need a cup of coffee or a cold shower!

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      Mohan Kumar 4 years ago from UK

      A- ha- crecendo and diminuendo- rise and fall, slow and fast, passion and pining - this tour de force of poetry makes me feel like a voyeur. The intimacy expressed and the sensual word play is truly awesome. Well done Dana, I am glad I came here to read it. Keep dreaming - if this what we all get to enjoy because of your dreams.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Daisy - It is so nice to have my progess noticed. The improvement seems to be coming naturally. WIth encouragement like yours, I will certainly keep writing. Thankyou.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      cclitgirl - Focusing on rhythm is still something I am learning. Why not do it by recreating a beautiful dream? I am happy to know it worked out ok. Thank you so much for taking the time to leave this comment.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      bizarrett81 - I guess you must like it, thank you so very much. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      wayne barrett - i am honored to receive such a comment from you. at times like this i tend to find myself taking a HOT shower. ;o)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Docmo - wow. what a comment. i am so pleased that you chose to direct your voyeurism this way. i like being watched... i must admit, i have learned a few things from you about how to write like this. thank you for the lessons in the form of your poetry... i will be sure to keep dreaming. when the dreams are like this, how could i not?!

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      Lauren Shumate 4 years ago from Georgia

      I love this, very deep!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      imthebean - Thank you so much for taking the time to let me know you enjoyed this. It means alot to me to hear from my readers.

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