My Very First Voluntary Poem

What a fabulous first poem. You have style!

wow. your poem is soo ahhmazing Josh. Im so glad to read your works. Very awesome. Voted it up!

Wow, for a first voluntary poem this is really good stuff. It's always difficult to be creative when you are being forced to put pen to paper so it's very refreshing when you get out of high school and realize that you can write just for the sake of writing. Definitely continue to write as much as possible when inspiration strikes. If you're anything like me then it will undoubtedly strike at 3 in the morning!

I will impart some advice a very wise person once gave me - Whenever inspiration strikes, no matter what time of day or night, write it down! Never let your mind wander and lose your train of thought. Even if it's 3 am, get up and start writing :-)

I'm here any time you need me!

Nice first shot, Josh! You're still young. Live your life, do for you in order to become the man you want to be. Then, you will be ready to share your life. Consider those who do not see your path are merely stepping stones to your destination.

I'm impressed with your fortitude. At your age, I only had attitude!

Well, after only one week on HP, I'm excited to see what week two brings for you. Good job!

This poem is so beautiful and well written.

Voted up and awesome, Joyce.

Very humorous poem and creatively written with a great flow.

May I suggest you continue on this genre? You have a creativity for it and I enjoyed this.

I'm a huge fan of humor as well as poetry.

Glad I found this.

Good choice on a simple-four line rhyme scheme for your first poem. I also liked your use of flappin' in the first stanza as it invokes images of birds. You might wish to keep that imagery going by using fly away instead of run away, perhaps mentioning her song and her laugh. It was a good first effort but the imagery needs polishing.

Looking foward to see what you write next.

Dang...good stuff, Josh!...up, beautiful, and interesting. Reminds me of the song Rev Tevye sings about turning around and his girls are grown up. Gotta share this one...

Very nice josh, for a first timer. Hmm... my advice would only be write one every day, or a few. The more you do the easier it gets to write from the heart and soul. This is what I did the last year, just wrote every day for hours what ever came to mind. Of course I have listened to a lot of genre music, poetry on hubpages, and just have to write. Funny thing is I never read anyones poetry but on hubpages. Fortunately i wanted it that way so the ideas and thoughts came from my own mind and not someone elses. Think most writers would say reading is helpful. Which it is. I just like to bend the rules. lol Well thanks for using me in your hub, and the support! Think practice is the the best remedy for anything until you're perfected. :)

Poetry, like all forms of writing is about communication, and having an open heart to begin with is a huge advantage. If you can express what you feel and learn the rules and art of language you'll be able to write poetry with ease. At the beginning its a good idea to read a lot of different types of poetry- I experiment with many. It gives you both parameters and creative ideas as to how you express yourself. A journey begins with a single step. let you passion drive you. T

Good job Josh, and thank you for the mention. I believe poetry to be story telling as an entree, succinct and meaningful. It requires two things, something from the heart and a pure expression of how you feel or perceive something. You're off to a great start. Enjoy!