I'd like feedback on my article: This is why LIVE broadcasting apps are...

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   SocialMuskerposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article This is why LIVE broadcasting apps are becoming popular day by day! (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Here are the problems that I can see:
      
      Remove the hashtags from your author bio.
      
      You might also want to check the colloquial meaning of the word 'musker'
      
      "Live broadcasting is appealing, current and receiving instant success and attention from everyone on the internet these days."
      
      No it isn't. Be careful of leading with untrue generalisations. It may well be an instant success but that doesn't mean that everyone on the internet is paying attention to it. Untrue generalisations detract from your credibility as a social commentator.
      
      Don't use ampersands (&) in your text. Write 'and' in full.
      
      Your intro tells us that online live broadcasting is the new big thing. Okay, but then you repeat that claim in the third paragraph.
      
      Your English isn't bad, but some of your phrasing is a bit awkward, such as "Like what was said earlier, live broadcasting is helping out and promoting small businesses." You don't need that first phrase, it's ugly.
      
      HubPages doesn't like watermarked images, or those that appear watermarked, so you might have a problem with all the images you've marked with 'HubPages'. Also, your article doesn't need that many images. There's no point to most of them. You have a call-out capsule that says "Builds relationships with viewers", then you have an image that says the exact same thing. And you do that all the way through. Beware of needless repetition, both in writing and imagery. It's just useless filler.
      
      Consider using sub-headings instead of call-out capsules. Sub-headings offer a chance of using  search-friendly key phrases, but Google can't 'see' the text in call-out capsules.
      
      Remove the links. HubPages doesn't want you sending readers off-site. Your article needs to contain all the necessary information to fulfil the title.
      
      Did I mention that repetition is not a good thing? Well as I read through your article, you are repeating the same ideas - over and over. You only need to mention once that live broadcasting is good for small businesses. Then you need to breakdown why and how. Your article would be half the length if you removed the unnecessary repetition. In which case, you should add more factual material to it.
      
      How do I start live broadcasting?
      What equipment do I need?
      How do I promote my live broadcast?
      Where do I find my audience?
      
      Get the idea?
      
      Oh... and the poll is not good. You are introducing the concept of live broadcasting to readers who are unfamiliar with it, and then you ask them what their favourite app is. Can you see the problem? If they are using LB, then they won't be reading your very basic article. If they are reading your article, then they won't have used an LB app before.
      
      Hope that gives you some ideas of how to improve it.

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         SocialMuskerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Hello,
         Bev!
         I'm very thankful to you that you've pointed out some important notes on my content. Well, after rewriting and fixing them, I've submitted again to HubPages and waiting for their review.
         
         Cheers!

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   pen promulgatesposted 6 years ago

   Hello Nazrul,
   
   I like your presentation; it has an appeal. However, these are few observations:
   
   Put the title in The Title Case. Even the subheadings.
   Don't use callouts for subheadings. Use a text capsule instead. I have heard some negative reviews about using callouts for subheadings.
   Also, keep the subheadings short.
   
   Honestly, as you highlight creative points, using different apps as examples (in every point) will make it more understandable and interesting. Like, how a particular app serves a purpose, how another app serves another purpose of the points you highlighted ..etc
   
   You have too many outgoing links. That itself will not let the article clear the QAP.
   Links like bigo, Alibaba etc could be deemed as promotional and spammy.
   Links must relate to the title of the hub.
   
   Hope these help.
   Good luck.

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      SocialMuskerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Assalamualikum,
      Hi Imran Khan!
      
      This is awesome! Thank you so much for your kind and appreciating words. I've submitted again with changing some of them. Let me see now the approval status! Will apply your points again if rejected again
      
      Cheers!

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