I'd like feedback on my Hub: Words are mere factors of emotions

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   rishabh doshiposted 9 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Words are mere factors of emotions (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      I have absolutely no idea what this hub is about.
      
      "But, is it the case in humans? lets not read you all dilettante stuff, but I gotta talk as it appears. No, it's not the case with humans, right? Lets be metaphoric, philosophy gave us iris but our insecurities keep on pricking it, lucky enough to have an iris so thick for a pricker [laugh]..."
      
      ???

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         rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         thank you already

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            theraggededgeposted 9 years agoin reply to this

            I'm sorry. I can see you put a lot of effort into this piece, and I'm sure it makes sense to you, however, it is impossible for your readers to understand the topic. Is it religion? Spirituality? Evolution?
            
            How does the hub expand on its title, "Words are Mere Factors of Emotions" What does that mean?
            
            What is the point (and all articles should have one) you are trying to make? Try writing the premise of the hub in one sentence.

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               rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               I was expecting this kind of reply, now that you've elaborated, tank you, really. I think I was aware of my style, I have this bad habit of putting all up in one, it's on me though

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               rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               hey, could you tell me what's wrong in my another hub? namely, quantum biology

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                  chasmacposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                  Your quantum  biology Hub has pretty much the same problem. Look at this:
                  "Quantum mechanics is something divine deity of the people who worship, atheists. Impossible should be done, or prioritize first."
                  
                  I've no idea what that means. It doesn't make sense - and that's just one example. You need to write in a more coherent manner and put your points across clearly and logically or HubPages won't feature your Hub.

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                     rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                     gotcha, but it's not what you might think of it as, okay though

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                     rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                     If I clear this jargon, would you bet on it get featured? I'm so tired of not being pointed out

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                        chasmacposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                        Jargon isn't the problem. The problem lies in how you present the jargon You can't discuss quantum mechanics without using some jargon, but you need to present it in a coherent manner. And you need to keep it relevant to the subject. There's no need to mention atheists or deities unless you're trying to make some connection between religion and quantum mechanics. If you do want to make that connection then that should be clearly stated - preferably in the title or at least in the first paragraph,

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                           rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                           well, if that's what you think, I follow you. Do you think it's the only problem, I mean all good other than writing? I respect your efforts, very appreciative, thanks

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                              chasmacposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                              Sorry, I don't know as quantum mechanics isn't a subject I know much about. We do have some experts on the subject here on HubPages, so maybe one will be able to advise you on that.

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      Marisa Wrightposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      HubPages is a place to write informative articles which provide helpful and useful information to the general public on topics of interest to them.
      
      Your Hub seems to be your own personal reflections on a topic, it is very rambling and unfocused, and hard to understand.  I cannot see how it would be helpful or useful to anyone, and I think it would be of interest to an extremely small number of people other than yourself - mainly because it barely makes sense.   I am not sure if that's because your English is not good, or because you are not editing your work after you have written it.   
      
      If you want to try to improve it, then you need to stop writing to please yourself, and think about what your readers want/need instead.

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         rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         I'll edit... I will try to do the both, regarding your last two lines. Thanks. You're smart! )

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   WriteAngledposted 9 years ago

   I think the main problem is that you have problems writing in English.
   Have you written these articles in another language and put them through Google Translate? That is what it looks like.
   
   To take the example already mentioned:
   "Lets be metaphoric, philosophy gave us iris but our insecurities keep on pricking it, lucky enough to have an iris so thick for a pricker "
   
   Iris in English means the coloured part of the eye, alternatively it is the name of a particular species of flower. Neither of these meanings have anything to do with philosophy, nor does the concept of a "thick iris" make any sense whatsoever. Going further, a part of the eye or a flower can in no way be a piercing tool nor even a person who would stick needles into people to test whether they were witches (current and old definitions of "pricker")
   
   If you are using Google Translate, please just forget the idea of trying to write here. Despite what uninformed people may tell you, it is a very poor tool. I know, because as a professional translator I have at times had the misfortune of having to correct abominations produced by Google Translate and sent by pretend translators to my clients.

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      rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Miss phD, you've seriously mistaken, and what about the translator thing? omg, I never used one..about iris, FYI, iris is a flat, coloured, ring-shaped membrane behind the cornea of the eye, with an adjustable opening which is "pupil" goddamn it! you're a phD! BTW, it also meant about the colours, how deeply we lose ourselves into the aura you could say
      Do you not think before you speak? I respect whatever you've earned here, but this not respectable. I got my account banned, you know the reason they gave me...your hub is an artificially generated article, SERIOUSLY? they bought what you said. This is just so CRAZY!
      Congrats you've ruined my account, my precious time (I'm a researcher), my hub, my earning account and everything.
      Pardon me if I have hurt you, whatever happened is just so not good, have a nice day, I don't wanna regret my time, must be something about my account that made you think I'm using  a translator, maybe I put too much commas. Don't comment anything about translator, as you must be knowing already its against the policy.
      PS: I'm not using translator

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         chasmacposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         Your account hasn't been banned. The Hubs have been unfeatured for poor writing quality. You just have to rewrite them in proper English and try again.
         WriteAngled hasn't ruined your account, and she didn't accuse you of using a translator; she simply asked if you were using one because that's what it looked like.
         HubPages didn't unfeature your Hubs because of what WriteAngled wrote but because they saw that the quality of writing was unacceptable. It was bound to happen.
         
         I think you owe WriteAngled an apology. She was offering genuine help.

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            rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

            wait, I was banned for two or some hours, I thought I got banned forever, I think they've rechecked the issue or something. I can't active my google adsense now, it says, I can't active it for past violation, I'm total flabbergasted.

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               theraggededgeposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               You won't get approved for Adsense on HP because your Hubs won't be featured. You have to seriously improve your English language skills in order to earn on HP. It's a long haul for not very much reward.
               
               Maybe you have a friend who can rewrite your article for you? You have interesting ideas and viewpoints but unless readers are *looking for that information* and *can understand it* you aren't going to attract many visitors.
               
               Your accusations against Write Angled are unwarranted. She was trying to advise you as you requested in your original post.

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               Marisa Wrightposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               Did you have an Adsense account already, before you joined HubPages? Or did you just apply for it?
               
               If you just applied, you will have to write 20 or 30 Featured Hubs and be a member for six months before you will be approved, because Adsense requires evidence that you are a good writer who is committed to writing online.

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                  rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                  like I said, it was active...even I was able to see some adds but the page did not meet hubpage's quality expectations

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                     theraggededgeposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                     Did you have an Adsense account before you joined HubPages? Can you log-in to your Adsense account on Google?
                     
                     Adverts appearing on your Hub don't mean you have an account.

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                        rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                        I'm sorry if I look like a naive to you. When I said some ads were appearing (from amazon) I mean it. I'm sorry but most of your comments are irrelevant, and yeah you have no right to keep disparaging me...yes, you are doing that.

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                           theraggededgeposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                           Your rudeness is uncalled for. If you don't want help, then you shouldn't have asked in the first place. I shan't bother wasting my time on you any more.

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                     Marisa Wrightposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                     Ads appear on your Hubs always.  If you do not have an Adsense account, then HubPages makes money from those ads, not you. 
                     
                     If you applied for Adsense here on HubPages, then it was never active - it is impossible.

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               WriteAngledposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               This is a totally separate issue from the linguistic matters discussed previously.
               
               People who do not already have an Adsense account will not be accepted for the scheme through Hubpages until they have quite a large number of published hubs of good quality; how many hubs are actually needed seems to vary, some get it with 20 hubs, others need 30 or more. Also, people living in certain countries, mainly in Asia and the Far East, have to wait until their account is at least 6 months old before applying.
               
               You say you cannot activate an Adsense account here because of a past violation. That is obviously nothing to do with Hubpages. If you have already had and lost an Adsense account for a violation, you will not be able to use it again on Hubpages, or anywhere else for that matter. Neither will you be able to get a new account in your name and using your address and bank details.
               
               Some people apparently manage to get round that problem by setting up and registering a limited company under a different address and opening a totally separate business bank account for the company. Quite frankly, given what most people earn on Hubpages and similar sites, it will most probably cost you more to maintain such a company (registration fees, accountant, bank charges, etc.) than you can ever hope to earn! You would be better off looking at non-Adsense ways to earn from web activity. These, however, do not include Hubpages since you need an Adsense account to be in the HP earning scheme too.

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                  rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                  well my google adsense was well active before they accused me of violation, and its hubpages(just to correct you)

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                     WriteAngledposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                     Since you have no published hubs, there cannot be a violation related to Hubpages!

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            rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

            and about sorry, I'm onto it. I do owe an apology to her, but I want to know what happened

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               rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               yeah, I think so too.
               PS: I'm sorry about accusation, I didn't know what to do, so yeah..the idea of yours and theirs matched so I thought maybe it initiated from here

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      rishabh doshiposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      you seem experienced, could you tell me how can I undo what has been done? It is really important to me, for I want to write about research papers, this could be a kick start to my career. Thanks.

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   FatFreddysCatposted 9 years ago

   The OP no longer exists.
   ...well, that's a shame. He seemed nice ☺

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   WriteAngledposted 9 years ago

   Yes, such a courteous young man....  :rolleyes
   
   Hmmm, emoticon not working, never mind

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