I'd like feedback on my Hub: Persuasive Messages with Blogging

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   SiteGeekposted 9 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Persuasive Messages with Blogging (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      chasmacposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Promoting your own site or service (Sitegeek in this case) in a hub is reason enough to fail the QAP.

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   SiteGeekposted 9 years ago

   Well, still the blog doesn't pass the Quality, seems there is something else, just giving the example of the website was not the issue.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 9 years ago

   As I read your Hub, I knew it was written by an Indian, even without checking your profile. I'd say this is your main problem.  Indian English tends to omit "the" and "a" where American and British English require them, and vice versa.  The QAP team are all in the US I believe, so they would read your English as being incorrect for that reason.

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   SiteGeekposted 9 years ago

   Well, I agree I'm Indian, but I checked my article, it seems to be grammatical correct in MS-WORD.

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      Marisa Wrightposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Your first paragraph as an example:
      
      "We all know the impact of ‘blogging’ and the attention people give to them (grammatical error - 'them' is plural, 'blogging' is singular.  So this should either be 'blogs' and 'them', or 'blogging' and 'it'). Due to this power, A few of the marketing companies have taken AN aggressive stance, by using ‘guest blogging’ for campaigning for their clients. Perhaps under THE misconception that it will be A short and clean way to bring search engine rankings and traffic to their websites."
      
      Also "short and clean" would not sound right to American ears, "quick and clean" would be more likely.
      
      And that is just the first paragraph.

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   SiteGeekposted 9 years ago

   I appreciate your suggestions, but I have written in narrative manner, in which the usage of words like 'a', 'the', 'it', 'these', 'those' is minimum.

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      Marisa Wrightposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      I just noticed this statement.  Sorry,but it's totally incorrect.   I'm not even sure what you mean by "narrative manner".  Americans and British speakers do not omit the definite and indefinite articles when speaking, if that's what you mean.  That's why it's so noticeable to us, when we are talking to an Indian speaker. 
      
      What you are now asking is for one of us to be your unpaid editor.  I'm happy to correct a paragraph or two to help you, but asking us to correct a whole article is going a bit far.

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   SiteGeekposted 9 years ago

   Hi Marissa, I have tried to convert it American English, can you please check it now, and suggest.

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      psycheskinnerposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      It is still not in what would be considered technically correct UK or US style English either formally or colloqially, see:
      
      We all know the impact of ‘blogging’ and the attention people give to them. Due to this power, few of the marketing companies have taken the aggressive stance, by using ‘guest blogging’ for campaigning for their clients. Perhaps under a misconception that it will be the short and clean way to bring search engine rankings and traffic to their websites.
      
      Would be:
      
      We all know about the impact of blogs* and the attention people give to them. Due to this power, some** marketing companies have taken an** aggressive stance and are using ‘guest blogging’ to campaign for their clients; perhaps under the**** misconception that it will be the quick and easy way to improve***** their search engine rankings and bring traffic to their websites.
      
      *"Them" cannot attach to a verb
      **"few" means it is essential not done, "some" means we are discussing that some do it
      ***As previous noted, "an" refers to a non-specific example of a type
      ****"The" is used for a stated, specific example
      *****Ranking is a trait inherent to a site, not brought to it.
      
      In terms of content, guest blogging is actually a declining practice. It has been penalized by Google since the Panda update.

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      Marisa Wrightposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      I agree with psycheskinner.   You still haven't made all the corrections I noted - and even if you did, that was just a very basic example to show how even a small thing like the odd missing "the" can be unacceptable.   Psycheskinner's version of that paragraph would be much better - BUT all the rest of the paragraphs need similar revisions.

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   SiteGeekposted 9 years ago

   Yes, I agree with psycheskinner, Google penalizes Guest Blogging, but still it drives a lot of traffic to your websites. For the people in the field of Journalism, it is the best way of communicating the message.

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   SiteGeekposted 9 years ago

   I have done few more corrections in the text to bring the American style of writing, can you please check, where I can improve more...

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