Review my Hub Selected to be Moved to Owlcation Please

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   lobobrandonposted 8 years ago

   Hey everyone, I recently got a mail saying my recently published hub "How Do Magnets Work"  is eligible to be moved to Owlcation and that I need to make some small changes before it could be moved:
   
   Keyword Use - With reference to the 4th point I assume, I also reduced the occurence of the word Magnet in the text as much as possible.
   Title/Subtitle Capitalization And Sizing - Worked on it as per the APA guidelines, I had recently posted a query about this. I'm hoping it's done right
   Spelling/Grammar - Had a typo in one subtitle
   Additional Note From Your Editor: Keyword: "magnet" (particularly in subtitles). - Worked on this issue the best I could see fit.
   
   I'd really appreciate it if someone could go through it, especially the sub-headings to make sure it's in order and if you've got the time and patience also the hub in general.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 8 years ago

   Lobobrandon, I'd have thought you'd know by now - when you get that email, you're being asked to make changes ONLY in the areas specified under the "specific issues" or "additional notes" section.
   
   All the other items in the email are just asking you to "sanity check" a few standard things.  They are NOT saying those aspects of the Hub need work, just that you should make a quick check to pick up any minor errors. Personally, I think it's a bad idea to make revisions that aren't asked for, because I could remove the very things the editor found attractive! 
   
   So, your problem is over-use of keywords, yes?  I can see that "magnet" and "pole" are still repeated a lot!  The only thing I can suggest is to see if you can find places where you can refer back to the previous sentence using "it",  "they" or "these", e.g   "Permanent magnets are well...permanent. Of course, nothing lasts forever, and in time (a very long time) even THEY tend to...."
   
   Another keyword that stands out to me is "Ferromagnetic substances".  You have it as a heading, then repeat it at the start of the next two paragraphs.  Having a heading and two paragraphs in a row, all starting with the same phrase is bad style and could trigger Google's filter.  I would suggest the sentence "Ferromagnetic substances can be really interesting" is completely unnecessary. 
   
   You also have multiple headings starting with "Understanding Dipoles" and numerous mentions in the text.   Instead, you could have "Understanding Dipoles" as a main heading, then a sentence to say there are several methods to help understand them, then your sub-headings could be "The Lego Method", "The Matchstick Method" etc.
   
   Similarly, where you have a short paragraph on a specific type of magnet, do you really need a heading "Facts on...."?   If you must have a heading, make it "Interesting Facts", but there's no need to mention the name of the magnet in a heading again, so close to the previous one, IMO.

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      lobobrandonposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Hey Marisa, thanks a lot for the feedback. To be honest, I thought the additional note was in addition to the other ones mentioned. This was the first time that a hub of mine was asked to be edited, the rest were sent directly and there was one reject. I've helped others figure out issues, but have never dealt with it personally.
      
      But I'm glad I asked, as you've pointed out quite a few places where I could make changes that I didn't realise were repetitions. Regarding the understanding dipoles sections, I personally used to use H3 headings in cases like this, but from the past hubs that were moved, the H3's were removed and converted to H2's. I'll definitely change those subtitles tomorrow too.
      
      Thanks again.

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         Will Apseposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         I hate the overuse of H2 headers (you are shouting at the search engines and the readers) and in recent edits my H3 headers have been kept, which is good. You certainly do not want too many keywords in H2 headers (though one or two are useful).
         
         As to errors that eds pick up on, I think I will start a thread listing which things the editors have focused on in my stuff. It will be a good exercise for me and might be helpful for others.

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         Marisa Wrightposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         From the emails I've received myself and helping others to respond to them, I am 99% sure that when you get one of those emails. the whole first section is generic - it's exactly the same in every email, and hasn't been tailored to the Hub in any way. So therefore, it's quite possible none of it applies!  The editor then adds a section at the end, telling you their specific concern, and if you don't address that, the Hub won't be moved.

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   Will Apseposted 8 years ago

   Interesting page, but I don't feel qualified to really offer much advice. Whenever my pages get a quick edit, the corrections run at about a dozen per thousand words. Not great, and I try pretty hard.
   
   The keywords seem OK unless you add up magnet-related words then it comes out above 5 percent:
   Keyword        Repeats    Density    Prominence
   magnetic        62                1.67%         51.64%
   magnet        50                1.34%         42.27%
   magnets        45                1.21%       55.45%

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      Will Apseposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      4 percent, you idiot.

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         Will Apseposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         How dare you call me an idiot!

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            Will Apseposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            You are an idiot and I will call you what I like!

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               Will Apseposted 8 years agoin reply to this

               I am reporting this.

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                  lobobrandonposted 8 years agoin reply to this

                  Haha Will. I hope you reported the rude guy on the forums.

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   firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

   ha ha ha.... Will, you are funny!

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