I'd like feedback on my Hub: Treat Me! please....

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    Sue Martinposted 20 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Treat Me!   please.... (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 20 months agoin reply to this

      Hi Sue,

      I see you joined two years ago but this is your first hub. So welcome.

      Wow, that's a very long hub.

      You might think about what you are trying to achieve with this and who your readers are. Are you sure this wouldn't be better on a personal blog? HubPages is concentrating on providing magazine-type articles at the moment.

      Your hub is difficult to read, simply because it is so large and very full of blocks of text. Could you slim it down a little and play around with the format? Perhaps introduce some bullet points? Remember that many, many people access this site on mobile devices. Not many will have the patience to read through the whole article. You could split the content over two or more hubs, if you can make the themes different enough.

      Some relevant, legal-to-use images would help to break up the text. The one at the top needs to be moved down slightly and made full width. If it's not of good quality, the hub won't be approved.

      The title needs work. No-one is searching for it. What would draw in readers searching for your topic?

      You also need an introduction. Who are all these people and why are you writing about them? An intro will explain what the article is about, why you needed to write it and why people should read it.

      You mention 'booklet'. Does this mean it has been published elsewhere? It's not a booklet, it's an article. We call them hubs but not to the readers as that would confuse them.

      Hope that helps.

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        Sue Martinposted 20 months agoin reply to this

        thanks

    2. Terrielynn1 profile image91
      Terrielynn1posted 20 months agoin reply to this

      Sue has the same info to share as I do. It's a great piece, but really long. I wish more people were willing to help fight addictions. The laws need to change and allow family to step in and help. Thank you for making people aware.

      1. Lynkay profile image78
        Lynkayposted 20 months agoin reply to this

        hi sue
        the plea for so many suffering from mental illness is just that 'Treat Me', and unfortunately the available services are usually full. This seems to be a problem world wide. I thank you for writing a hub on this issue.
        I agree with the theraggededge your post is too long and, I feel that if you gave each case you highlighted a page of it's own with information about the disorder and treatment available and where to go for treatment might help.
        Maybe you could explore self help groups, not perhaps the best way to go, but may help a few to better health.
        But you are right something needs to be done sooner than later.
        hoping this helps

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          Sue Martinposted 20 months agoin reply to this

          Thanks but your suggestion would be longer.  I thought of possibly a series of articles but is effective as a group.  My dilema is too long for an article and too short for a book.

    3. Kathleen Cochran profile image80
      Kathleen Cochranposted 20 months ago

      Me too!

    4. lifelovemystery profile image91
      lifelovemysteryposted 20 months ago

      Hi Sue, I recommend that you write an introduction so readers will know what to expect. Also, using segue's and images to break up the text could help as an introduction to each of the characters in your hub. You may also want to include statistics with links to the references.

      Good Luck!

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        Sue Martinposted 20 months agoin reply to this

        thanks, but dilemma results your sugestons may make even longer

    5. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 20 months ago

      Sue, we're trying to help you get the article approved. You are welcome to ignore suggestions, of course, but if you want to help people by attracting significant traffic, you'll need to implement them. Articles must be mobile-friendly these days, and yours isn't as it stands.

      You could break it up by putting similar cases together in two or more hubs. That gives you even more opportunity to help others.

      All articles should have an introduction. They don't just launch into the main section, otherwise readers won't know what it's about. All web articles need a search-friendly title. Your title is what appears in search engine results. You want it to appear in response to relevant searches.

      You could comb through it to reduce the word count and tighten up the writing. Look for repetitive sentences and words that can be safely left out. The tighter the writing, the greater the impact.

      Hope you get it featured - it's important.

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        Sue Martinposted 20 months agoin reply to this

        Thanks for the help,  I will return and repost as several shorter hubs.  Thanks for the advice

     
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