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  1. Rosa Ann Crowder profile image70
    Rosa Ann Crowderposted 9 months ago

    Can someone please help me make my hub http://hub.me/al0YL better? thanks

  2. HoneyBB profile image98
    HoneyBBposted 9 months ago

    I could try.

  3. Rupert Taylor profile image100
    Rupert Taylorposted 9 months ago

    Your first sentence:

    "It is so natural for you to use your spiritual gifts and talents within your comfort zone. I relate! When you step out of your comfort zone magic is significant in its strength and extent; it is important to make it all visible to yourself."

    Sorry Rosa, but that makes absolutely no sense to me. I have not the faintest clue what you are writing about.

  4. Robert Sacchi profile image84
    Robert Sacchiposted 9 months ago

    It is an uplifting article.  It gives readers something to think about. 

    In the poll question you used "rather" when you may have meant "whether". 
    You could add the version to your Bible quotes.
    You may want to rethink the clip art style graphics.  Real pictures might work better. 

    The sentences, you may want to think about adding more sentences. For example instead of "I relate!" a sentence or two explaining most people feel that way and why they feel that way may be more useful to the reader.  Remember you know what you are thinking but the reader might not.

  5. psycheskinner profile image85
    psycheskinnerposted 9 months ago

    I think the feeling could be more clearly described.  I am not sure what it is.

    1. Rosa Ann Crowder profile image70
      Rosa Ann Crowderposted 9 months agoin reply to this

      thank you

 
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