I'd like feedback on my Hub: Lessons Learned From Our Beaumont Fixer

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   CabbageForHomesposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Lessons Learned From Our Beaumont Fixer (must be signed in to view).
   
   What can I do to improve? Many Thanks!

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      Jeremy Gillposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Here are my ideas:
      1) Insert commas where needed to provide pauses in longer sentences.
      2) Spread your photos throughout the Hub rather than putting them all at the end.
      3) Some text blocks are too large; consider using bullets or another method to break them up.
      
      Your pictures themselves look nice, so the real thing to focus on is organization. Best of luck.

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      Sherry Hewinsposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Wow, great information! You did a great job on your fixer, and I think you've made a pretty decent hub about it. One thing I think would improve your chances of being found in a search is to change your title.  "How about Lessons Learned From flipping Our Beaumont Fixer?" That one keyword will bring you more traffic.
      
      I did see a few minor grammar errors, such as in the first sentence. "On our Beaumont fixer, we assumed our house will sell quickly (in 30 days or less) and we were wrong." it should be "our house would sell..."
      
      I'm thinking that fixing minor mistakes like that should get your hub featured.

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         CabbageForHomesposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you, Sherry, appreciate the feedback. I will go ahead and change the title of the post as you suggested . It's a learning process for me, for sure!

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            Sherry Hewinsposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Good luck to you. We all learn as we go along. If you keep writing informative hubs like this, I think you will do well.

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   CabbageForHomesposted 6 years ago

   Thank you, Jeremy, for taking the time to read the post. I will try to shorten the sentences, insert commas or break down the content into bullet points. It's a learning process Will update per your suggestings!

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   CabbageForHomesposted 6 years ago

   Looks like the QA score has actually gone down after my edits. Hmmm. What else might I be missing?

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      I think the article needs a better introduction. I'm in the UK, as are many of HubPages' readers and I had no idea what the title meant. I still don't know if a 'Beaumont fixer' means the house is in Beaumont or whether it alludes to something else. So, can you lead in with a introduction about what fixing and flipping is?
      
      Don't begin with 'On...' it's grammatically incorrect. "We assumed our house would sell quickly' is a better start, but you still need that intro reworked. As it's a personal account, why not begin with who you are and what you are trying to do? Then that would take you in to a description of what a 'fixer' is. Don't assume your readers know what the various technical terms mean.
      
      I think you have included too many photos. The article isn't about the work done on the property, but about the mistakes you made in marketing it, therefore, the extensive before and after photos are not necessary. One external 'before' and one 'after' would be sufficient. That means you could write another hub on the actual process of doing the place up and then use all those pics.
      
      Also to note, if you are thinking of using HubPages to promote your business, it won't work. However, if you simply keep writing great hubs on the topic, you may attract more business. D'you see what I mean? Promotion, not good. Informative and useful articles, good
      
      Hope that helps.

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         CabbageForHomesposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you, you are correct. I should include a description what flipping and fixer mean for a reader in a different industry. This is so very helpful.
         
         I do intend to share my experiences on HubPages, and of course hoping to attract business in the future through articles. Does the article come off as self-promotion? If so, is there anything else you think I should include in there to avoid sounding like one?

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            theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Not at all. It's fine. You're taking exactly the right approach. Business 'enhancement' can work here but you have to be oh-so-subtle about it. Your articles will do the advertising for you without adding links or obvious promotion.
            
            I think the article could be a little longer, as it is a complex topic, but that's your choice.

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