I'd like feedback on my Hub: Dissociative Identity Disorder Systems

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  1. Dr Bill Tollefson profile image77
    Dr Bill Tollefsonposted 9 years ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I have done everything that I changed before. I took off all my web address on my pictures. Other than change of title and pictures nothing was added or change.
    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Dissociative Identity Disorder Systems. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. Shades-of-truth profile image82
      Shades-of-truthposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Bill, I believe we are not supposed to have several sales capsules in a row. The hub will be viewed as overly promotional.

      There are a couple of other things, but I would not be the proper one to comment on those. Wait until one of the more seasoned Hubbers responds.

      1. Kristen Howe profile image89
        Kristen Howeposted 9 years agoin reply to this

        You're the second hubber who asked this at the forum. Use some ebay and Amazon capsules, 1-3 high-quality photos, keep the word count between 700-1300 words. Drive traffic to your hub by social media networking via sharing here or via Twitter and other websites. Tweak as needed.  I suggest you'll check out the Learning Center for tips. I'll stop by your hub and check it out.

        1. Dr Bill Tollefson profile image77
          Dr Bill Tollefsonposted 9 years agoin reply to this

          I really want to thanks you for your suggestions.

      2. Dr Bill Tollefson profile image77
        Dr Bill Tollefsonposted 9 years agoin reply to this

        Thank you for your comments. had it on here for years but I change 3 pictures (quotes) and then suddenly it was no good. Attempting to fix it but it is not happening so far.

  2. Marcy Goodfleisch profile image82
    Marcy Goodfleischposted 9 years ago

    Bill -

    Your hub looks very informative and also clearly has information supported by your qualifications. I am not sure what HP's QAP reviewers might have flagged, but here are some things I'd suggest:

    The first photo (which seems to be one of your own) might appear to have a logo/watermark on it, and that is something the site watches & screens.

    The layout could be more visually appealing if you move some photos or videos to the RH side and create more of a linear look in a few places. The wide chunks of text are not as popular on the Internet.

    Consider distributing the Amazon capsules throughout the text rather than having them together. The guideline is to have at least 100 words of text in the hub per capsule. I am not sure how the site feels about text in the actual capsule - that might be an issue (there's quite a bit of text in the ads).

    Consider editing just a bit to deviate from the 'I did this' or 'I wrote this book' style (even though you are clearly qualified), and make the references to your work more oblique.  I don't know if there's a rule about posting a link to your own book or other product - that might be an issue because Amazon would be paying you twice.

    Those are just my thoughts - not sure if they're the issues holding things up.  It's a nice hub and interesting topic!

    1. Dr Bill Tollefson profile image77
      Dr Bill Tollefsonposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the comment about the watermark. I changed all 3 pictures and took them off. I took out a video and Amazon. So far there is no acceptance. That article had been there for 3 years and it was featured. Change 3 Quotes and bam, it is not right for them.
      Again thanks.

      1. Marcy Goodfleisch profile image82
        Marcy Goodfleischposted 9 years agoin reply to this

        Bill - has it actually be kicked back to you, or just not approved yet? If you are still waiting for approval, sometimes there's a backlog.  Also, I don't know if they let us know in any manner other than on the accounts page - the arrows will stop spinning.

        1. Dr Bill Tollefson profile image77
          Dr Bill Tollefsonposted 9 years agoin reply to this

          Thanks Marcy Goodfleisch for your support and feedback. I will wait to see.

  3. janshares profile image92
    jansharesposted 9 years ago

    Hi Bill. There are a few things I observed about your hub that may be affecting your QAP:

    "Who is your audience?"
    I can't tell if your talking to students, practitioners of your techniques, or your colleagues/peers. I don't understand all of the information, it feels a bit over my head. So I'm not sure who it will reach and if it's written at a level that will hold the attention of the average reader who might find this topic interesting.

    "Does your content answer the title of the article?"
    Unless I missed it, I didn't see where you explain what Dissociate Identity Disorder is. Is this like a "Part II" to focus on the treatment of DID which you may have already addressed in another article or video? You use the acronym "DID" a lot (which may throw off an algorithm), without defining it with criteria. Also, The first image may be confusing as to what S.U.M. is and what that equation means.

    Is this article balanced in terms of informative versus overly promotional?
    I'm not sure what the ratio is regarding how much experiential information is presented along with expertise but with all the mention of your work (links, ads, videos), the QAP algo might be reading overly promotional rather than informative, backed up by experience and expertise.

    1. SmartAndFun profile image93
      SmartAndFunposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      I agree with Jan's points. I couldn't follow this article but it could be that I am simply not a member of the target audience.

      I couldn't figure out what exactly Dissociative Identity Disorder is, what a DID System is, or what exactly "musing" is in regard to DID. The article's main focus seems to be musing, but first mentions Incorporation Therapy and Life Coaching Philosophy with little explanation of what those are. Maybe they don't need to be mentioned at all? Maybe they do -- I'm not sure what they are or what they have to do with musing. Maybe this article is written for those who are already familiar with these terms?

      Maybe some specific examples would be helpful? "Patient 1 was experiencing symptoms a, b and c, but after (number) months of therapy, including techniques x, y and z, the patient's symptoms lessened to the point that he was able to return to work."

      While reading the article, I wondered if perhaps it is written for fellow counselors and physicians? As an "average Jane," I'm not sure what this article is trying to convey -- but of course I may not be the target audience. Maybe that is why I didn't understand the information.

      I also wonder if too many of your publications are being mentioned or advertised. Are your videos promotional as well? I'm sorry I didn't watch them -- there is just too much noise/TV/talking going on here at the moment and I do not have my earbuds handy.

      Although not a big deal, I saw several instances where proofreading would come in handy, such as a missing "a" or "the" here and there. A few more commas would be helpful, I think, such as "to survive, the brain unhinges" instead of "to survive the brain unhinges."

    2. Dr Bill Tollefson profile image77
      Dr Bill Tollefsonposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      It was written to survivors. I am one myself and I want to give others the hope that they can recover themselves. I will work harder to get it so it will be helpful and understand able. Appreciate your time.

  4. Marcy Goodfleisch profile image82
    Marcy Goodfleischposted 9 years ago

    Jan -

    Good job - these are great questions!

  5. Alicia Fey profile image64
    Alicia Feyposted 9 years ago

    DID is the current name for Multiple Personality Disorder


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