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I'd like feedback on my Hub: Places which are cheap and beautyful

  1. autoboat47 profile image60
    autoboat47posted 4 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Places which are cheap and beautyful (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image99
      theraggededgeposted 4 months agoin reply to this

      Hi there,

      I haven't looked at your article, but your title is misspelled. It should be 'beautiful' and also needs to be in title case.

      Hope that helps.

      1. autoboat47 profile image60
        autoboat47posted 4 months agoin reply to this

        thanks.But can you read it.

        1. theraggededge profile image99
          theraggededgeposted 4 months agoin reply to this

          I think you've had some good advice already smile

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image100
    Rupert Taylorposted 4 months ago

    I went a little further than the Ragged Edge and it didn't get any better.

    "When you are arrived in India, You Can Take Flight to Bhuntar (kullu) from Dehli , or you can take Bus from there to the Manali. Volvo bus Service is available to this place by HRTC."

    This is how it should read.

    "When you have arrived in India, you can take a flight to Bhuntar (kullu) from Delhi, or you can take a bus from there to the Manali."

    Eight corrections in one sentence.

    Your English language skill is not up to HP standards.

  3. pen promulgates profile image41
    pen promulgatesposted 4 months ago

    Hi Abhinav,
    Welcome to Hubpages.
    The first paragraph itself has many grammatical errors. Please proofread the article.
    For instance, you wrote when you are arrived, when it should be when you arrive or when you have arrived.
    You wrote people hires, when it should be people hire.
    You have misspelled the word beautiful throughout.
    Are your images legal to use?
    Images must have creative common license. You must have permission to use. You can't just download from Google.
    Will give detailed feedback later.
    Good luck.

  4. pen promulgates profile image41
    pen promulgatesposted 4 months ago

    I am sorry to say this Abhinav, the article needs much improvement.
    You capitalize verbs, prepositions, and any random word in the middle of your sentence.
    Your punctuation is improper.
    Verbs don't agree with the subject, (people hires, you reaches Manali, etc)
    You are giving basic instructions that doesn't have to be given at all (when your stomach is full go there, take staircase, etc)
    You inform people to have hash as that's available too? Big no-no.
    Is your poll a poll or just what you want to hear? Your options are yes and yes of course.
    Use apps like Grammarly to fix grammar issues.
    Work on your writing style too.
    I have given some feedback above.
    Hope these help.
    Good luck.

  5. FatFreddysCat profile image99
    FatFreddysCatposted 4 months ago

    Anything I could add would simply be "piling on" at this point. Sorry dude, this article is not going to pass anytime soon unless it has major surgery.

 
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