I am looking for feedback on my new article. Thank you!

  1. sarahspradlin profile image81
    sarahspradlinposted 2 months ago

    I have tried to take peoples feedback and apply it to this new article. I was told to break up paragraphs more, have better titles explaining what will be discussed and to check grammar. The grammar is what I'm struggling with the most...
    I would appreciate your advice!
    Thank you so much!

    https://hubpages.com/living/Your-Guide- … nt-Complex

    1. Jeremy Gill profile image90
      Jeremy Gillposted 2 months agoin reply to this

      Here are some suggestions:

      1) Some sentences are a bit awkward. Example: "Well, yes it is but to an extent."
      2) Find ways to break up the larger bodies of text. Your "Maintenance Issues" section desperately needs a breather. More headings, bullet points, pictures, or videos in-between would help.
      3) I'd perhaps remove your last poll, though that's just a personal opinion of mine.

      You're close, keep at it. Let me know if you need more-specific help, and best of luck.

 
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