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I'd like feedback on my article: Why passion is important

  1. Ajay Lokesha profile image46
    Ajay Lokeshaposted 6 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Why passion is important (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. Jeremy Gill profile image97
      Jeremy Gillposted 6 months agoin reply to this

      Here are my suggestions:

      1) Capitalize key words in your titles and headings.
      2) Reword awkward sentences like "Passion is the love to do."
      3) Break up the text in the middle with more photos/videos
      4) Remove the Amazon capsules. I know you're hoping to earn from them, but they just aren't relevant enough to include.
      5) Proofread and correct grammar/spelling errors.

      To be honest, this is a broad topic that I don't think will draw viewers in, but editing the Hub can still help you gain practice and knowledge for future articles. Best of luck.

      1. Ajay Lokesha profile image46
        Ajay Lokeshaposted 6 months agoin reply to this

        Thank you so much, Jerome !
        I will consider your feedback to improvise.

    2. NurseFlood profile image93
      NurseFloodposted 6 months agoin reply to this

      The entire hub is plagiarized.  The part that is not plagiarized is poor grammar.  It seems that English is not your first language.  If you want to publish your work, it would behoove you to take a grammar or English course.

    3. TIMETRAVELER2 profile image100
      TIMETRAVELER2posted 6 months agoin reply to this

      This article is very difficult to read.  Your skill with English is very limited.  You have long lists.  There is no flow...in short, it is almost impossible to understand what it is you are trying to say. 

      Clearly you know little about  how to structure an article.  Each must have a beginning, a middle and an end.  The information must be clearly stated and topic sentences need to be supported by those that follow.

      I would hesitate to even try and correct this article because it is too jumbled.  You should take a basic English Composition class before trying to write on a site like this.

    4. yogaburnclub profile image85
      yogaburnclubposted 6 months agoin reply to this

      Hi out there
      Well done for the great attempt to write a nice hub, however there are some few comments that I can make that will help improve your hub in future.
      1.Do more research on your title it needs to communicate well.This is the first thing readers see which also determines if they will continue to read the entire article.
      2.Make your first paragraph eye catchy as most people will read your first paragraph in order to know if they will continue with the rest of the article.
      3.Avoid adding bold content as they interrupt the reading process.
      4.Use subheadings that are short and easy to comprehend.
      5.The use of multiple capsules video, pictures and polls should flow with the entire articles.

      You have a great opportunity to improve most of us started worse than you, Keep reading the quality review system including the quality of a Stellar article.

      All the best

      1. Ajay Lokesha profile image46
        Ajay Lokeshaposted 6 months agoin reply to this

        Thank you for a great feedback !
        I will improvise as recommended, Yogaburnclub

  2. FatFreddysCat profile image100
    FatFreddysCatposted 6 months ago

    "What are the reasons for not linking passion and profession
    - we might have just never thought of
    - may be, we are afraid of getting lost in the race of commons
    - non availability of needed resources
    - compulsion to earn for livelihood"


    1. Ajay Lokesha profile image46
      Ajay Lokeshaposted 6 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks for being straight in f/b... let me develop this article in a much better way