I'd like feedback on my article on Handmade Greeting Card Gift Ideas

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  1. sarahamichels profile image59
    sarahamichelsposted 12 months ago

    Dear Hubbers,

    I have just published my Hub - Handmade Greeting Card – One of the Best Ways to Say Happy Birthday Dad

    However, it couldn't pass the quality criteria. I'd like some help with passing the quality assessment process. What can I do to improve?

    Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 12 months agoin reply to this

      Hi there, welcome to Hubpages,

      Your article hasn't been approved because you are trying to promote your business, Sarah, it's against the ToS.

      And, although it shouldn't prevent your article being approved, there are many instances of awkward phrasing throughout the hub. For example:

      "A beautiful card in the form of pants will cause the warmest emotions of your dad on his birthday. It is not difficult to do this!"

      Pants seems to come from nowhere. Maybe if you explained about creating a card-sized article of clothing? And, anyway, why would pants cause Dad to have the warmest of emotions? I'm confused. Maybe I'm missing something?

      Get rid of the exclamation points. They should only be used if you are making an exclamation, like "Yes!" or "Hey!"

      You can't take images from Pinterest or Google and republish them on a commercial website, such as Hubpages. You have to have permission from the owner of the image. Using photos without authorisation could land you with a hefty demand for payment. https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use

      In any case, why not show your skill and display your own handmade cards?

      Hope that helps.

      1. sarahamichels profile image59
        sarahamichelsposted 12 months agoin reply to this

        Thank you for your suggestions Bev.
        I have tired posting before without website url and Pinterest image but had same issues.
        Again, I edited and published as you suggested.

        1. theraggededge profile image97
          theraggededgeposted 12 months agoin reply to this

          Your article needs images. It's a visual topic. Can't you add your own images? It only takes an afternoon to make a few cards to illustrate your hub. Step-by-step photos of the process of creating just one card project would be helpful.

          Paste your text in to Grammarly (free online) and Hemingway (also free) to improve your English.

          You need to determine your purpose here. Do you want to be a writer, or are you hoping to promote your business? It is possible to do that but you have to do it by creating a strong brand and *not* by direct linking. HubPages is not really the best place for self-promotion. Social media is far more effective.

          1. sarahamichels profile image59
            sarahamichelsposted 12 months agoin reply to this

            Thanks for the help, Bev. Removed old images and creating new.

    2. Marketing Merit profile image95
      Marketing Meritposted 12 months agoin reply to this

      I agree with Bev.
      It doesn't appear that English is your first language. Your article doesn't flow smoothly.

  2. pen promulgates profile image55
    pen promulgatesposted 12 months ago

    Agreeing with Bev, I have these observations:

    1) A substantial part of your article looks wordy. Especially the first few paragraphs. The importance of handmade cards is over emphasised. What I mean is, you have presented the same idea and meaning in different sentences. That looks as if it's spun.

    2) Awkward phrasing:
    Many sentences are awkward to read.
    For example, 'Traditions for a cheerful father'
    sounds weird.
    Something like 'Ways to Surprise Your Father.' may sound better. 

    Further, it's written..
    'Hands can implement a similar idea.' this is again very unsettling.
    Sentence structure matters a lot.
    You can rewrite that as 'Handmade cards express a similar idea.'

    'The catch is to steal the father's palm print cunningly and use it for such an original application.'
    Cunningly?... It gives a negative meaning.
    'The catch is to get the print of your father's palm without his getting to know what surprise you have secretly planned.'

    Bev has highlighted crucial issues.
    It's a good topic and your writing is fine.
    A little bit of proofreading is needed.
    Tweak your hub and it should feature.
    I have a hub 'How sentence structure will fail you in quality.' Read it if you feel like.

    Good luck.

    1. sarahamichels profile image59
      sarahamichelsposted 12 months agoin reply to this

      I have implemented your suggestions. Thank you Imran.

  3. Martha Bern profile image60
    Martha Bernposted 12 months ago

    I've read your article and I should agree that it sounds a bit weird. So, listen to the recommendations posted by other users, who are experienced writers and have submitted lots of quality articles to HubPages already. At the same time, I couldn't but notice that the article is interesting and informative. Once you correct the mistakes, re-submit your article once again to have it approved. Good luck!

    1. sarahamichels profile image59
      sarahamichelsposted 12 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you Martha.

 
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