I'd like feedback on my article: OMG!!!....I'm Pregnant.

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   tinahanna7posted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article OMG!!!....I'm Pregnant.. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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   AliciaCposted 6 years ago

   Hi, Tina. Your article is interesting. You should proofread it because it contains some word errors. I think the main reason that it's not featured is the Amazon capsules, however. They aren't directly related to the article. You don't describe the items that you're trying to sell or say why you recommend them, which is what we need to do in articles that link to Amazon. Another problem that I noticed is that two of the photos are watermarked with the name of a website.

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   daydreamsposted 6 years ago

   Hi
   
   Probably the main thing you need to do to pass QA is remove the Amazon capsules. They aren't very relevant.
   
   I think it could also do with a proofread and you should slow down on the multiple punctuation marks!

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   pen promulgatesposted 6 years ago

   Hi Tina,
   It's nice of you to encourage others through your own experience. Your article is powerful that way.
   
   These are my observations:
   The first few paragraphs are a little wordy. Ideas are repetitive. For example, statements like 'whether it's your first child or 5th,' then again 'whether it's your 1st child or seventh.' etc (well that should not stop it from getting featured, I say it because the article would sound more appealing if worked on further).
   
   The main issues have already been highlighted. It's the watermark images and Amazon capsules. A little bit of grammar too.
   
   Good luck.

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   tinahanna7posted 6 years ago

   Thank you everyone. I made some changes and I hope they help.

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   tinahanna7posted 6 years ago

   UGH!! I did some edits following everyone's advice but now my article isn't even passing QA. What did I mess up? I have good ideas for articles just can't seem to get this thing right.

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      Jean Bakulaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi tinahanna7'
      It's informative. I think even now there are just too many exclamation points and question marks in several places. Just use one. Otherwise it looks like you did what everyone advised. They are picky and it could be just that. Wow, seven kids! You are a marvel. Best Wishes.

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