I'd like feedback on my article: Hats off to the Fascinator!

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   carolyntaylorposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Hats off to the Fascinator! (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Have you made sure that your Getty images are licensed for use on a commercial site? I know that some images are free *for personal, non-commercial use* but they have been known to sue people. And HubPages is a commercial site.
      
      https://www.thebalance.com/what-is-a-se … er-3514942
      
      Also, your topic is Kate and the fascinator, so you might consider finding a Creative Commons or Public Domain image of her wearing one.
      
      There are several punctuation issues. Try reading your text out loud or pasting it into Grammarly. 'Fascinator' doesn't need to be capitalised unless at the beginning of a sentence.
      
      It's 'Royal Ascot', not 'the Royal Ascot'. Also I don't think the Queen herself laid down the dress code Fascinators were banned from the Royal Enclosure at Ascot. http://www.bbc.co.uk/news/uk-england-berkshire-16607875
      
      The article is a bit too short and the topic is a little dated. These kind of articles about KM came out years ago. Also the content is just too 'thin'. There's nothing of great interest in it; you could say it lacks a 'fascinator' Couldn't you add more about the history of these hats? Who wore the very first one? How did they evolve? After all they've been around a long time. Do some research into your topic and produce an article worth reading

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         carolyntaylorposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you.  You have been very helpful.

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   psycheskinnerposted 7 years ago

   I also thought the article seemed a little dated as it doesn't mention or address the fascinator hate that developed (whre brides banned them and they became considered naff), and you could give some more modern punky examples that might interest a modern audience and show that fashionable options are still available.

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      carolyntaylorposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for your help.

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