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I'd like feedback on my article: Biography of Shaheed Zulfiqar Ali Bhutto

  1. Karamsiddiqui profile image60
    Karamsiddiquiposted 5 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Biography of Shaheed Zulfiqar Ali Bhutto (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image99
      theraggededgeposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      Hi there,

      You have copied and pasted a section of the biographical info without making it clear that you are quoting. The rest looks like a thin rewrite of information that is already readily available.

      It's only three paragraphs long, which is simply not long enough to be called a 'biography'.

      My advice is to come at this topic from a new angle, something more personal perhaps? And expand it to at least four times the current length.

      1. Karamsiddiqui profile image60
        Karamsiddiquiposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

        Thanks for your suggestion.

  2. AliciaC profile image98
    AliciaCposted 5 weeks ago

    In addition to following the suggestions given by theraggededge, you should correct the English errors in your article. The article could be very interesting if it's improved.

  3. Dishant Varshney profile image80
    Dishant Varshneyposted 5 weeks ago

    you should worn on writing the biography.

  4. Dishant Varshney profile image80
    Dishant Varshneyposted 5 weeks ago

    work on*

 
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