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I would like to improve my article.

  1. Ivan Hernandez profile image91
    Ivan Hernandezposted 4 weeks ago

    Hello, Hubbers. I have written another political article. Here it is

    https://hubpages.com/politics/America-A … e-of-Trump

    How do I improve it? Criticism might help, but only via it's constructive.

    I know that net neutrality is gone, and it is a devastating blow to our broken democracy. My original lead photo was going to be a burning flag, but I didn't want to disrespect Americans.

  2. paradigmsearch profile image93
    paradigmsearchposted 4 weeks ago

    Paste this into Google image search: bill of rights void where prohibited by law

    Hopefully there is a public domain copy out there. smile

  3. Marisa Wright profile image98
    Marisa Wrightposted 4 weeks ago

    Hi, Ivan.

    Your readers don't know what a "capsule" is, so I would change that first sentence to start with, "The first photo serves as a reminder...."

    "Kim Jong-ung's dictator rule" should be "Kim Jong-un's dictatorial rule".

    I think you should end the article at the Trump quote about The Apprentice.  Delete the section titled "A Secret Confession from the Author"  because it's too personal and not relevant.  Delete the "Works Cited" section.  If you have already hyperlinked to your sources in the article, you don't need to mention them again at the end.

    1. Ivan Hernandez profile image91
      Ivan Hernandezposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      I fixed the article. Can you check the article again?

 
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