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What type of improvement does this article need?

  1. Aman Ullah Ghazi profile image61
    Aman Ullah Ghaziposted 2 weeks ago

    https://hubpages.com/health/Four-Concep … elf-Esteem

    I've checked my article on some online checkers. It scored 100/100 in uniqueness and 61/100 on vocabulary.

    1. theraggededge profile image100
      theraggededgeposted 2 weeks agoin reply to this

      Hi there,

      It's not so much grammar as phraseology. For example,

      "Self esteem or self confidence is a term of psychology. Self esteem directly depends on how you look into yourself, do you consider yourself as an effective and a good character person?"

      You don't need to tell your reader that self-esteem is a psychological term. Most adults will know exactly what it means, otherwise they wouldn't be searching for articles about it.

      I would rephrase the second sentence as,

      "Your level of self-esteem depends how you see yourself. Do you think you are an effective person (whatever you mean by that) with a good character?"

      Currently, your phraseology is a little awkward. Almost every sentence needs improving, and we can't do that here.

      I have to say that the article is too short to cover a big topic like this. The descriptions of your four concepts are perfunctory and lacking depth. For instance, what does having a 'good character' really mean?  And how do you judge what is 'good'? Good to some is not good to others. It means having unshakeable core values. But what are they? And who gets to decide?

      I would dispute 100 percent that someone needs to believe in God to have a healthy level of self-esteem. That appears to be your personal viewpoint. It won't resonate with everyone.

      You need to go back and work on this article to bring it up to scratch. Don't forget, you are competing with other sites with far greater authority... this one, for example: https://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/nu … elf-esteem

      Here's one from a hubber: https://owlcation.com/social-sciences/W … confidence

      Can you compete in Google search results with those articles? If you can't, then think about writing about a topic that you have personal experience of.

    2. TIMETRAVELER2 profile image98
      TIMETRAVELER2posted 2 weeks agoin reply to this

      Good morning:

      Your writing tells me that you are a second language speaker of English, which is why you are having problems with correct phrasing. 

      Also this article is far too short.  You should have at least 1000 words, preferably more.

      Your first sentence, as noted by another writer here, is not correct.  Self esteem actually is not the same thing as self confidence, although the two are closely related.

      Self esteem is how you feel about yourself.  Self confidence is how strongly you believe that you can do well at something.

      It's very important to be correct when you are writing for the general public.  This means using terms correctly as well as using correct English.  Until you master these two things, don't expect to have articles featured or moved to niche sites.  The team is very picky, as they should be.

      1. Aman Ullah Ghazi profile image61
        Aman Ullah Ghaziposted 2 weeks agoin reply to this

        You gave me some hope. smile
        Thank you

  2. Aman Ullah Ghazi profile image61
    Aman Ullah Ghaziposted 2 weeks ago

    This is helpful.
    Thank you very much.

 
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