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I'd like feedback on my short story: Good Wood and on the intro blurb

  1. Teeuwynn Woodruff profile image94
    Teeuwynn Woodruffposted 2 months ago

    Hi All,

    I'd love to see what you think of my short story and the intro blurb.

    Are they good? Do they work together? Or would you recommend a different hook?

    Thanks!

    - Teeuwynn

    https://hubpages.com/literature/Good-Wood

  2. Teeuwynn Woodruff profile image94
    Teeuwynn Woodruffposted 2 months ago

    Hi all! Still hoping for some feedback on my story and blurb if any folks get the time.

    Thanks!
    Teeuwynn

    1. theraggededge profile image100
      theraggededgeposted 2 months agoin reply to this

      Your story is already on Letterpile, so be careful that you don't violate the forum guidelines.

      It looks good. Maybe could do with pruning (s'cuse pun) some adjectives? Look for stronger verbs instead.

      Typo: "Its trunk hd been nearly six feet..."

      We can't see the 'blurb' when reading the hub. That only shows up on your profile and Google result.

      Cool story.

      1. Teeuwynn Woodruff profile image94
        Teeuwynn Woodruffposted 2 months agoin reply to this

        Thanks for the feeback and the notes about Letterpile. I just realized my story was on there!

 
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