I'd like feedback on my article: The Bacteriologist Waldemar Haffkine as a...

  1. Mykola profile image40
    Mykolaposted 2 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article The  Bacteriologist Waldemar Haffkine as a Bright Example for  Future Doctors (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image99
      theraggededgeposted 2 months agoin reply to this

      Hi Mykola,

      The same feedback as I gave you previously applies to this hub.

      The premise is confusing. The title says the hub is for student doctors; the intro talks about language studies; the body includes numerous letters. I can't keep saying the same things: choose your SINGLE topic and stick closely to it.

      Are you teaching history?
      Writing a biography?
      Addressing student doctors?
      Teaching language skills?
      Displaying letters? What are those about? You don't mention them in the intro.

      Why all the photos? Too many.

      Remove the Amazon capsule for the microscope; it has nothing to do with the topic. You article is not about microscopes, so it shouldn't be there.

      You really need to spend some time learning how to structure an article properly. This is not working for you and you are wasting your time on these long, convoluted pieces.

      1. Mykola profile image40
        Mykolaposted 2 months agoin reply to this

        Hi,theraggededge! Thank you for your answer. Yours, Mykola

 
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