I'd like feedback on my article: TOP 5 THINGS TO DO WHEN YOU ARE UNDER STRESS.

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   fakehaposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article TOP 5 THINGS TO DO WHEN YOU ARE UNDER STRESS. (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Titles written in uppercase are stressful Remove the period/full stop too. Your subheadings should not be in uppercase either.
      
      Your article needs an introduction to tell your reader what it's about.
      
      There are a lot of improvements you can make, maybe you should spend a little time learning what HubPages expects from writers? Visit the Help Center https://hubpageshelp.com/ There is a lot of information available.
      
      Good luck!

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      Michael-Duncanposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, apart from the points that have been raised so far, there are some extra spacings before periods and commas especially in the last capsule, so running the article through a grammar checker would help. Otherwise, you've done a commendable job.

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         fakehaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         thanks

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   Dominic Vaughnposted 6 years ago

   Hello, Fakeha! After reading through your article (which is great by the way!) I have noticed a few things that might help.
   1) The first thing listed is "COFFEE" I am feeling the vibe that it is all capitalized as it's an exciting thing (coffee is, don't get me wrong). but the QA people might see this as incorrectly done. It has happened to me before once on previous posts and upon lower-casing all but the first letter, my article was approved.
   2) In the listed sentence under 'COFFEE' you have this sentence "People generally consume coffee for caffeine , " There is a space after the e in "caffeine" and between the coma, so it should say "People generally consume coffee for caffeine, " and I would replace "it" to "as it is" so the completed sentence would say
   "People generally consume coffee for caffeine, as it is a potent source of healthy antioxidants."
   I would end the sentence there as well, instead of continuing with comas.
   
   Overall, it's the structure of the sentences that's preventing QA from featuring the article.
   
   for example, the whole first bullet point under Coffee would look better like this -
   "People generally consume coffee for caffeine, as it is a potent source of healthy antioxidants. Caffeine provides us with a short term memory boost, as well as assisting us with being fit."
   
   This is a more proper structure with grammar. I see a lot of this example in the article and I believe that using the fix I included as an idea to fix the rest of the article will help you learn, as well as pass QA. I am strapped on time to look over the entire article and list specific fixes, but if assistance is needed, later today, I will provide some assistance. Good luck!

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      fakehaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      thank you so much

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         Dominic Vaughnposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         You’re welcome!

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