I'd like feedback on my article: The Implication of Machiavellian Thoughts

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   Jibran Sameerposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: The Implication of Machiavellian Thoughts (must be signed in to view)

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   Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

   I only had time for a brief skip through your article but I noticed many grammatical errors.
   
   HubPages only accepts writing that is in near-perfect English.

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      Jibran Sameerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you

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   CYong74posted 6 years ago

   This is not "The Implication of Machiavellian Thoughts." This is far more "Why I think US and other Superpowers are Evil."
   
   You are free to express your political opinions, I suppose. But you should at the very least avoid simplifications. US having troops in South Korea isn't a might is right example, considering how much armament brother Kim has on the other side, or what DPRK has been doing for decades. The lands of the Middle East might be holy, but it is also quite a stretch to say the leaders of the Middle East are hapless puppets trapped in someone else's conflict.

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   Jibran Sameerposted 6 years ago

   You are right, and i just focused on big powers. Dirty game in Middle East or in South Asia etc is a conflict of interest you know, and i think it is the implication od Mechavellian thoughts.

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      Jibran Sameerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      I am not targeting anyone, i am just talking about prevailing of NATIONAL INTEREST and the victims of such conflicts.

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         CYong74posted 6 years agoin reply to this

         That is a key issue, do you not realize? Your entire hub is about these. Not Machiavelli and his philosophy.

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            Jibran Sameerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Right

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      DrMark1961posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      The title is deceptive. Deceptive articles have little chance of doing well here. The only sentence that mentions Machiavelli is gramatically incorrect.
      A better title for this would be "Why I Hate the US". You would do okay with this on a blog where a bunch of university professors can read it and pat you on the back. You do realize Hubpages is a US site, right?

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         Jibran Sameerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Gramatical mistake? If i title it as you mentioned, i think it is to target someone, and i do'nt dislike anyone.

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            DrMark1961posted 6 years agoin reply to this

            This is your sentence on Machiavelli:
            Ethical values have no space in international politics stated by Nicholas Machiavelli.
            It is incorrect.
            That is the first sentence! Even if I did find your article somewhere, I would be unlikely to go on after that.
            "The Donald Trump administration lost their temper and put the Humanity in calamity. " This is your last sentence. The grammar inbetween is not any better. As Rupert mentions, this sort of writing is not going be accepted here.

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               Jibran Sameerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               Shit, you are right

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               Jibran Sameerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               But i had summerized the complete philosophy of Mechiavelli and deduced the statement that i depicted.

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   Jibran Sameerposted 6 years ago

   Could someone guide me, what does this mean?
   
   

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   theraggededgeposted 6 years ago

   Follow the instructions. They are your guide to getting your article onto one of HubPages' network sites.
   
   These sites are likely to get more traffic to your article so it is always a good thing to have them moved.
   
   Congratulations.

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      Jibran Sameerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      A bundle of thanks

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   DrMark1961posted 6 years ago

   If you want to submit your Kashmir article to Owlcation or Soapboxie you will potentially have a lot more traffic. This is important since if no one ever reads your article no one is going to learn anything from it. It will take some serious editing though, so if you have an English teacher that can help take a look at it that is a good first start.
   "But again, is a beg of question would be it accepted to stakeholder?" Is a sentence from your article. This needs to be written clearly.
   Your photos do not have a source. (You have put the description under source. A source is where you obtain them.) They need to be from a creative commons site like Pixabay. There are all kinds of great photos of Kashmir.
   Your text capsules need to have subtitles. This will make it easier for the search engines like Google to identify the substance of your article.
   Go to those sites and look at the most popular articles. Your article needs to follow a similar pattern. You can also read the Hubpages FAQ for better information. https://hubpages.com/faq/

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