I'd like feedback on my article: Diabetes: Color Vision and Visual Acuity

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   Uswa Sabtainposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Diabetes: Color Vision and Visual Acuity (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      greenmindposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Your article is much too similar to the website where you found the information. It will not be featured, sorry!

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         Uswa Sabtainposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         It was my research conclusions actually which was real and empirical in nature but to meet the criteria of QAP... what should be needed?

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            greenmindposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Hi -- okay, maybe it's one of these issues:
            -- your article is a little short. HP likes about 1000 words average
            -- your article has no sources or bibliography showing authority. This is very important for a medical article
            -- you need to establish your credentials and position to write a medical article
            -- your images may not be free to use
            
            It may be one or more of these issues causing you trouble!
            
            By the way, there is a vast difference in English quality between your profile description and the writing in this article. If they look at that, moderators may be suspicious.
            
            Good luck,
            GM

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               Uswa Sabtainposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               Thank you for detailed response Sir, I will try to amend it accprdingly.
               Regards

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      agilitymachposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Aside from all of the above, your article reads like a medical abstract - not an article written to the average person on the street. Your title suggests the article will be about vision and the diabetic, but you start with a confusing definition of diabetes rather than a lead paragraph talking about vision and the diabetic. You actually don't get to vision until way down the article. I'd suggest rewriting this in everyday language and removing the confusing medical terms.
      
      As others have mentioned, I didn't see your credentials presented. Are you an expert in the field of diabetic retina disease? If so, show that. If not, you probably won't get approved. Google has gotten very strict about health articles, and sites with authors who aren't experts are being dinged in searches, as it should be.
      
      BTW, I am a diabetic with non-diabetic eye disease and understood the article, but if I weren't, I am sure I would have had no clue what was being presented.   I believe you have something good to say, but you need to find a different way to say it and prove your credentials too. JMHO though.

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 7 years ago

   I agree with Greenmind about your article being too similar to your information source. I even ran the first 175 words through Copyscape and received this message:
   
   “19 results found for the text you pasted (175 words ... on 28 Mar 2018 at 1:18 GMT.”
   
   By the way, the ellipsis is there intentionally.

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      Uswa Sabtainposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you, will keep these things in mind.
      Regards

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