I'd like feedback on my article: Tips and tricks to plan the perfect bridal...

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   Saaniya Aamirposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Tips and tricks to plan the perfect bridal shower! (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      You need to sort those bios out. You can't write about weddings and include a bio that states you have dark circles
      
      Go here to edit/create your bios, then make sure you select an appropriate one for each hub: https://hubpages.com/my/hubs/about-the-author

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   Bede le Venerableposted 7 years ago

   Saniya, first I commend you for the creativity and charity displayed in setting up your sister’s bridal shower.
   
   Regarding the article, you must consult this article for proper capitalization, both for your main title and sub-titles:
   
   https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/Lear … iting-Tips
   
   You would do well to add more content to each tip and trick. That doesn’t mean add a bunch of filler. Rather, do some brainstorming and even consult other articles to get some inspiration.
   
   Like Bev mentioned, redo your bio at the top of the article. Something like this might work: “Saniya is a dental student with much experience in planning a wedding.”
   
   I recommend putting all book titles into italics rather than quotation marks.
   
   Finally, do you have at least the free version of Grammarly? There were several instances where you needlessly capitalized a word.

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   Bede le Venerableposted 7 years ago

   One other thing, I’m sorry for misspelling your name…

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   RedElfposted 7 years ago

   Bede has raised some very good points.
   And you certainly are off to a good start...
   It would be helpful to describe each of the activities instead of just a brief overview. How did they use the photo booth at your sister's shower? Did they dress up and take pics of each other? Did they do their makeup? Wear fancy hats?
   How about a list of popular shower games?
   When you mention who to invite, did you make fancy hand-made invitations? Were they printed on your computer?
   Also you mention the food and sharing it among the bridesmaids - how did they do that? Did one of them love to make fancy cupcakes, so that was her contribution? Did they make finger sandwiches (fancy, dainty two-bite snacks)? What about a quick and easy recipe or how to assemble ribbon sandwiches (or something)?
   You have the basics and some lovely photos, but not a lot of description, and your tips are fairly general. More detail please - I'm sure the shower you planned for your sister was awesome and lots of fun... just need more of that in your article

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