I'd like feedback on my article: How to Build Windows 10 Provisioning Packages

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   mohsinulposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: How to Build Windows 10 Provisioning Packages (must be signed in to view)

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   Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

   Sorry to break the news to you but your command of English is not up to the standard required by HubPages.

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   Natalie Frankposted 6 years ago

   There are some things you can work on.  The main one for me may just be a reflection of the fact I'm a computer idiot.  It seems like there's a lot of technical information without a lot of description to explain the purpose of the article and the technology described.  Start with a good intro, describing in laymans terms what it is you will be discussing, what it is used for and what types of problems it can solve for the reader.  Then go through and organize the article better to form a linear discussion where one topic leads naturally into the others. 
   
   Include a discussion of each section and not just lists of items. Lists are good but just not in the absence of a clear discussion of what they are for and what each item means.  Also when you include lists, be sure to use bullets. 
   
   There are some formatting issues such as your headers which you can find information about at the learning center.
   
   Make sure to proof read for errors, typos, missing words, grammar and incomplete sentences.  You would also benefit from having a native English speaker (or at least one that is fully fluent in the language) to help you with editing.
   
   Your images should be clear and demonstrate something about the section they are being used to illustrate.  Your first picture doesn't really add anything to the article, and the one captioned Customize Provisioning Packages is blurry and the type too small to read and that is on a full size computer.  I didn't check it but I imagine it's impossible on a mobile device, especially a phone screen.
   
   Spend time studying the material in the learning center to discover what HP expects of articles that they publish.  There is a lot of useful information there that I'm sure you would benefit from.  I would recommend starting with content creation and publishing standards.
   
   Hope this is helpful.  Good luck!

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