I'd like feedback on my article: Quiz About Eggs

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  1. Gloriousconfusion profile image89
    Gloriousconfusionposted 3 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Quiz About Eggs. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. Marketing Merit profile image95
      Marketing Meritposted 3 months agoin reply to this

      For me Diana, the article seemed to lack structure and jumped around quite a bit. I was unsure if the intent was to have a quiz about eggs, as per the title, share a poem or retell your experience about the bad egg. You then include a random photo of a Faberge egg. I was left feeling rather confused to be honest. I did like your illustration of the soldier dipping his head into the egg though!

      I would also be inclined to remove the links at the end of the article. The advice I was given previously, was to include anchor text links within the article. Ideally, these should relate to items that may require further clarification.

      Hope this helps.

      1. Gloriousconfusion profile image89
        Gloriousconfusionposted 3 months agoin reply to this

        Thanks, I'll have to give it a re-think, and take your advice.

        1. Gloriousconfusion profile image89
          Gloriousconfusionposted 3 months agoin reply to this

          Right, I've moved things around and re-vamped it and made the links within the text instead of as a separate item. In fact I deleted 2 of the 4 links.

  2. Gregory DeVictor profile image95
    Gregory DeVictorposted 3 months ago

    Hello Diana!

    You wrote:

    “Quiz About Eggs And Additional Discussion”

    “On This Web Page You Will Be Able To Enjoy a Quiz About Eggs, And Maybe Learn A New Fact Or Two About Eggs”

    “Here's The Quiz About Eggs That You've Been Waiting For:”

    “How Did You Do In The Egg Quiz? - Did You Get Top Marks? I Bet You Didn't!”

    “Returning To Bad Eggs: - The Point I Want To Make Is That I Haven't Seen A Bad Egg For Years,Until After I Had Started Writing This Webpage”

    “A Faberge Egg A Poster from AllPosters Exquisite Workmanship - Look At That Enamelling”

    “Here's An Eggy Poem I Wrote Myself - It's A Children's Poem Really”

    “Egg And Soldier”

    Diana, these passages do not conform to APA guidelines regarding capitalization. Rather than getting into detail, here is some information about APA capitalization guidelines that I found on their blog:

    “Here are directions for implementing APA’s title case:

    Capitalize the first word of the title/heading and of any subtitle/subheading;

    Capitalize all “major” words (nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, and pronouns) in the title/heading, including the second part of hyphenated major words (e.g., Self-Report not Self-report); and

    Capitalize all words of four letters or more.

    This boils down to using lowercase only for “minor” words of three letters or fewer, namely, for conjunctions (words like and, or, nor, and but), articles (the words a, an, and the), and prepositions (words like as, at, by, for, in, of, on, per, and to), as long as they aren’t the first word in a title or subtitle.”

    Diana, here is a link to the entire discussion about capitalization:

    http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2012/ … style.html

    I hope this helps.

    1. Gloriousconfusion profile image89
      Gloriousconfusionposted 3 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks Gregory, I've always done that in the past, but recently about a month ago, I was told by an editor to make ALL words in the headings capitalized.  I felt uncomfortable about it, but I was directed to an article about standard practice in USA so, as HubPages is American, and in view of what editors favor (like spelling it the American way instead of "favour", the English way), I thought I had better go with the system rather than fight it.

  3. RTalloni profile image86
    RTalloniposted 3 months ago

    A fun idea for an otherwise boring subject, not that I don't like eggs, but they are pretty common. Seeing what you've done with this hub has my brain working... smile

    Re your question here, one problem is that word repetition begins immediately.  The post is short enough that you should be able to go through and work out ways to tremendously reduce word repetition.

    In spite of what an editor told you I would double check the info on title guidelines. You can see in this winning HP article that they definitely approve correctly written headings: https://dengarden.com/gardening/How-to- … ter-Cactus

    The capsule titles are also long. Reducing them to catchy titles and putting the info in the paragraphs below would be a good change to make. The main title could be catchier, for instance "Eggs: The Good, the Bad, the Smelly" lets a reader know there is more to the article than a quiz without directly saying it, which is always more interesting.

    A bit of reorganization could greatly improve the article's structure. Step back for a bit and let consideration of what would work best roll around your mind for a while. Do some reading of other short food articles with an eye out for the best and worst of how they are put together.

  4. aesta1 profile image90
    aesta1posted 3 months ago

    Hi Diana. I suggest that you do an outline of the things you want to include and just focus on the quiz. Forget the other discussion in your title. You still can talk about eggs but in relation to the quiz. The first subtitle is too long. When you have a structure, all the other things you have there will fit or not and if they don't fit, let it go. The quiz is interesting so make that your focus.

  5. Gregory DeVictor profile image95
    Gregory DeVictorposted 3 months ago

    Diana, according to the HubPages Style Guide and Helpful Writing Tips:

    Proper Use of Capitalization in Titles and Subtitles

    “Readers will get an idea of whether they can trust or distrust your content in the first few seconds of looking at your page. Proper capitalization in your title and subtitles is an indicator of your Hub's credibility. We recommend using standard title case when formatting your titles and subtitles and using the APA guidelines (or another comparable publication) for guidance. Here are a couple specific guidelines for capitalizing your titles and subtitles:

    Always capitalize the first word of a title or subtitle.

    Capitalize all “major” words (nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, and pronouns) in your title, including the second part of hyphenated major words (e.g., High-Quality not High-quality).

    Capitalize all words of four letters or more.”

    For the complete discussion, here is the link:

    https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/Lear … d_23601919

    1. Gloriousconfusion profile image89
      Gloriousconfusionposted 3 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks Gregory,
      I'll take another look.

  6. Polly C profile image94
    Polly Cposted 3 months ago

    I think the title is wrong. Although the hub seems to touch on several different points about eggs, it's very difficult to convey that in a title and so your title has ended up being very vague and rather confusing. When I read the hub, I thought that the topic I would most like to be actually searching for online would be 'how to tell when an egg is bad'. I'm always googling things about food preparation whilst I'm cooking, but I don't think I will ever google 'quiz about eggs' - unless perhaps for an Easter game, and then that would only be on one day of the year!  I think (not that I'm an expert!) that you should have a more specific title and then include the other bits just as fun extras.

 
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