I'd like feedback on my article: WHAT TO DO WHEN YOUR ENEMY GET INTO YOUR HANDS?

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  1. Majesty Emperor Aroma profile image76
    Majesty Emperor Aromaposted 11 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
    Here is my article: WHAT TO DO WHEN YOUR ENEMY GET INTO YOUR HANDS? (must be signed in to view)

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  2. FatFreddysCat profile image94
    FatFreddysCatposted 11 months ago

    First impression:

    TURN OFF YOUR CAPS LOCK AND GET RID OF THE EXCESSIVE BOLD FONT. IT LOOKS LIKE YOU'RE SHOUTING AT THE READER.

    ...see how annoying that is?

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  3. Rupert Taylor profile image98
    Rupert Taylorposted 11 months ago

    Your use of English is not up to the standard required by HubPages. Your title alone has a grammatical error in it and is a statement not a question so doesn't need a question mark.

    A colloquialism such as "wanna" does not belong in a properly written article.

    The use of all caps is inappropriate and is the equivalent of shouting.

    Check out some articles from HubPage writers with high scores (above 90)  to see how to present articles.

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    RTalloniposted 11 months ago

    Take note of the criticism here and work on understanding how to write in English. The way this article is written is confusing at best.

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  5. Kenna McHugh profile image91
    Kenna McHughposted 11 months ago

    Being literate is key to being a good writer. I recommend that you read some HP articles and get an idea of what it takes to write for HP. Then tackle writing an article.

    Ask yourself: Who is your audience? 

    Tell a story, use real-life examples, and then proof your article, and proof it again.

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    1. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 11 months agoin reply to this

      'Illiterate'? Are you sure? big_smile

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  6. Kenna McHugh profile image91
    Kenna McHughposted 11 months ago

    Oops. I will edit it.

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