I'd like feedback on my article: Disappointment due to fake friends

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  1. profile image59
    CelinaAdoreposted 7 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
    Here is my article: Disappointment due to fake friends (must be signed in to view)

    1. OldRoses profile image97
      OldRosesposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      In your profile you say that one of your hobbies is blogging.  Unfortunately, this is not a blogging site.  This is a site for serious writers who produce magazine quality articles of approximately 1,000 words.  Try Blogger or Wordpress (both are free) if you would like to start a blog.

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      Lucille Uttermohlposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      Hi, I am a new hubber myself. However, I have a lot of writing under my belt, and may be able to help you.
      Your article needs a lot more detail. Why was traveling by youself a challenge? How did you meet this friend? What did he / she do to encourage you to meet at Pizza Hut? What do you think of as a good friend? How did this person fail you before? What did this friend do in the past that made you think you could trust him to show up?

      1. theraggededge profile image99
        theraggededgeposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

        Hi Lucille,

        This kind of article doesn't work here. Blog posts and ultra personal anecdotes are discouraged.

        HubPages wants informative magazine-style articles, so the OP could perhaps turn it into an advice piece and include her own experience as an example.

      2. profile image59
        CelinaAdoreposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

        Good Advice! So the key would be magazine style articles right.   I am just begining.  So I started by Sharing my experiences.  As a beginner what steps would you recommend to me.

  2. AliciaC profile image97
    AliciaCposted 7 weeks ago

    Leena, everything that I said when you asked for help with your last article applies to this one. You should also write your title in title case and check for grammar errors in your post.

    You need to study the Learning Center carefully or at least look at articles that have been featured. If you don't, you are going to be repeatedly disappointed when your own articles fail the Quality Assessment Process.

    1. profile image59
      CelinaAdoreposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      Thanks for your valuable feedback.  Really appreciated.

  3. theraggededge profile image99
    theraggededgeposted 7 weeks ago

    AliciaC, I don't think some of these newbies actually understand what we say to them.

    1. CYong74 profile image96
      CYong74posted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

      I doubt they even read our comments.

      1. DrMark1961 profile image97
        DrMark1961posted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

        Sometimes they do. I know this because they reply by telling me I am stupid for taking the time to criticize their errors.

        1. theraggededge profile image99
          theraggededgeposted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

          Oh, but that's never, ever happened to me big_smile big_smile big_smile

          1. DrMark1961 profile image97
            DrMark1961posted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

            I have been meaning to ask you where you buy your "Newbie Armour"? Is that for sale in the shops there in Wales or do you have to order it from Amazon?

            1. theraggededge profile image99
              theraggededgeposted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

              We don't need armour - we have thick skin and dragon scales big_smile


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    2. AliciaC profile image97
      AliciaCposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      You may be right, Bev. It's a bit strange. On the other thread, the OP said that the information would help them, yet they've ignored all the suggestions.

  4. FatFreddysCat profile image97
    FatFreddysCatposted 7 weeks ago

    This is not an "article." It's barely a paragraph.

    Take this crap to Tumblr.

    1. DrMark1961 profile image97
      DrMark1961posted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

      blogspot will take her too

  5. DrMark1961 profile image97
    DrMark1961posted 7 weeks ago

    That makes a lot of sense. I am unprotected here.

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  6. EricFarmer8x profile image99
    EricFarmer8xposted 6 weeks ago

    Like others have said, this article is flawed, as this format will not work on HubPages. This is something that could work on a personal blog. Maybe.

    First, you want to break paragraphs up. Nobody wants to read giant walls of text up. Insert some white space.

    Create some headings. Use a title tool to get the casing right. It helps me a lot.

    Also if I ignore the fact this article wouldn't work anyway, this doesn't tell me very much. You need to write more.

 
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