I'd like feedback on my article: The Ultimate Men's Packing List

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   Jakob Vingborgposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: The Ultimate Men's Packing List (must be signed in to view)

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      Indelible whisperposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      It looks like a highly promotional article. I don't think the sale of more than two Amazon products are allowed in one article. Also, you can choose to use bullets and pointers other than capsule heads.

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      Eurofileposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I agree with the previous points about Amazon. In my first article I wanted to put Amazon links for two guidebooks I had used on my trip. In the end I deleted the Amazon capsules and the hub went through. It has made me very wary of Amazon capsules since.
      Your article is well illustrated, but maybe you could add an eye-catching opening photo or illustration. I recall seeing a list on a cartoon type drawing which might work.
      I noticed that you are using the blue title font for lists of items. It might work better if you downgraded these words to a normal black font and size.
      It would draw your article together if you could finish it with a concluding paragraph.
      I hope this helps. Be encouraged everyone on Hub Pages had to start out like you. It won't take you long to master the art of writing for Hub Pages.

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      greenmindposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi -- you definitely have the right idea! You write clearly and you're picking up on things people might search.
      
      It should be featured, but I agree those Amazon products are getting in the way. Strip out all of your Amazon links and if it's featured then you'll know that was it. You're not going to sell any Amazon products until you have substantial traffic, which takes time, so there's no point in putting them in there now. Go back and add a few later and see if that works.
      
      On a different note, I think your packing advice is a little obvious. It's not the passport and ticket I forget, it's the dental floss and electric razor. If I were you I would change my approach and lead the article with those things that I actually need reminding about.

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         Jakob Vingborgposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks I will try that

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   Same issue with Amazon links as in your fragrance piece.

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   Jakob,
   You have asked for help on three articles, which means you need to study the guidelines if you have continued rejection from HP. Added to the fact, you are new to HP. Keep in mind there is a learning curve to writing spectacular articles on HP that are not only featured but moved over to their respective niche sites.
   Here are the guidelines - http://hubpages.com/learningcenter/contents

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