So puzzled with the quality of my article, sincerely for help

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   Stennisposted 5 years ago

   Hello, I'm new here. I have tried so many times, but I am still told that my article does not meet the standard of HubPages. Is this because my mother language is not English? Would you tell me why? Thank you so much.
   This is my article below:
   http://hub.me/amYoB

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      quotationsposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I do not mean to sound harsh, but if you want to improve your writing, you need to understand what the problems are.
      
      As others have mentioned, there are many grammatical errors in your writing. There is hardly a single sentence that is correct.
      
      Some of the problems are glaring, others are more subtle and not obvious except to a fluent speaker of English. For example, you wrote: "The actual hearing range of different people is different." This sentence is arguably grammatically correct. It would probably pass a review by a computer program like Grammarly, but it is incorrect in terms of that unquantifiable essence that makes a sentence sound right, and not stilted or foreign. It is hard to convey what that is; only practice and fluency in a language can enable you to pick the right word order and make word choices that sound right.
      
      In the same vein, your article does not properly explain what it is about. You start off by giving an example of Michael's music sounding fuzzy. Who is Michael and why would I care? You would be better off making a generic statement such as "If you are a musician and your music sounds fuzzy, the problem might be ..."
      
      And then you jump right to this statement:  "Part of the key is Equalizer (EQ). Before diving into Equalizer (EQ),"
      
      Apart from the grammatical problems with that sentence, what is an EQ? Why does it matter to the article or to the problem of fuzzy music, especially since you then go off to talk about human hearing ranges?
      
      The problem is not just grammar, but exposition. No proof reader is going to read past that mess of an opening paragraph. I would strongly suggest that you first spend time reviewing some top rated articles in your area of interest and gain a better understanding of how they are laid out and how the theme of the article is expounded.
      
      Hope this helps.

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         greenmindposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Quotations, thank you for taking the time to so eloquently put into words the almost ineffable shortcomings in the work of non-English speakers who genuinely and sincerely try to achieve here on HP. I'm not sure it will help them, but it definitely helped me.

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      Shing Arayaposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Maybe you need to edit your articles before you pass it on there site. You can ask a friend for help or use some tools.

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   The English errors may be part of the problem. In addition, you should avoid the use of the slang term "wanna". I think the Amazon capsule is very likely a problem, too. Your article is about the human hearing range. Noise-cancelling headphones don't seem like an appropriate item to sell. Telling the reader "Just hit the button below" makes it seem like the goal of your article is to sell headphones. I would immediately close an article if I read that phrase. I think many other readers would, too.

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   CYong74posted 5 years ago

   Stennis, very sorry to put it this way. Your article is full of English writing errors. To the extent it's very difficult to read. For example:
   
   "Michael is the beginner of producing music. One day he said, "Oh, why is my music so fuzzy?"
   
   The answer is complicated. Part of the key is Equalizer (EQ). Before diving into Equalizer (EQ), we had better know something basic first. This is the root of Equalizer (EQ), called "human hearing range".
   
   Your opening sentence is wrong. It is not "beginner of producing music." It should be "amateur music producer."
   
   The second paragraph should be something like:
   
   "The answer is complicated, part of which begins with Equalizer settings. But before we discuss that, we must understand the human hearing range, which is the basis of ..."
   
   And so on.
   
   You might like to work on your English sentence structures before trying again. Also, whether your mother tongue is English, or not, is irrelevant, IMO. (We don't even have the concept of a mother language where I am) It's a matter of properly learning the language through reading, writing, and other forms of practices.

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   Stennisposted 5 years ago

   Thank you all. I think I have got my answers now. Let me try to improve my article...

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      TIMETRAVELER2posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      As a former ESOL teacher I'm going to give you the best advice I have.  Take some courses that immerse you in the English Language and its Grammar.  This site is based on using English, and until you have a firm grip on the structure and grammar of this language you will continue to have problems passing the QAP.  There are people who write here who are second language speakers that do quite well, but their language skills are outstanding.  Unfortunately, yours are not.

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   Stennisposted 5 years ago

   I can't imagine this discussion can also help other Hubbers, I will keep this discussion updated.
   
   Sorry, the currency I use is collapsing now and the price of food is soaring. I think I have to earn some foreign currency. I think I am too scared to speak clearly. I just modified my article until all night.
   
   Although I think the words above are critical, I still listened to all the suggestions carefully. Because I think if a stranger wasn't trying to help me, that person would just keep quiet and leave.
   
   Thanks to John Hansen's encouragement, I will continue to write -
   "Stennis, it looks like you listened to the comments given to you in the forum to improve this article. Well done."
   
   And my current mood is:
   "When I am down and, oh my soul, so weary
   When troubles come and my heart burdened be
   Then, I am still and wait here in the silence
   Until you come and sit awhile with me"

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I don't want to upset you, but you are not going to make a lot of money here unless you can write popular articles fast and accurately. I'm thinking that it might be better, if you are desperate for cash, to find another way. It took me 37 articles and almost as many months before I reached payout. And I'm a native English speaker and had already been earning by writing.
      
      I feel your pain, and I don't want you to waste your time.

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