Please suggest improvements for my article on English Tongue Twisters

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   Diana Grantposted 5 years ago

   https://hubpages.com/education/english_tongue_twisters
   
   10 English Tongue Twisters to Improve English Pronunciation
   
   Not sure what else I need to do to get it accepted by Owlocation - or any other niche site - as it is published on HB but rejected by Owlocation subject to improvement.

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   There are a few inconsistencies in sub-head title casing, but they're not critical.
   
   I think the frequent use of boldface and boldface italics might be an issue. It makes the layout look messy, and boldface is seen as being shouty on the Internet.

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      Diana Grantposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks Rupert, I've removed the italics and only used bold face now for the actual sayings.

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   I agree with Rupert. The bold print could be a problem. The links to your other articles could be, too. The first site that you link to doesn't seem to exist any more. When I clicked on the link, I got a warning saying that it was dangerous. The incomplete summaries in the descriptions of your articles look strange.

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      Diana Grantposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks Alicia, I've deleted the links to my other articles now.

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   Your title has "English" in it twice.
   Your bio needs a period(.) at the end.  That is a red flag that you need to proof your article.
   The bold type has a specific purpose. In the writing guidelines, HP discusses this.
   https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/HubP … tyle-Guide

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      Diana Grantposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks Kenna, I have deleted one "English" in the title, added a full stop in my bio, which meant I had to write "&" instead of "and" in order not to exceed the 140 character limit, and I have removed the bold type except for the tonguetwisters themselves.

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   FatFreddysCatposted 5 years ago

   Try this one:
   
   "Betty Botter bought some butter but she said: 'this butter's bitter! If I put it in my batter, my batter will be bitter, but a bit o' better butter will make my batter better!'
   So Betty Botter bought some butter, better than the bitter butter, put it in her batter. She put a bit o' better butter into her batter, made her batter better."

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   Diana Grantposted 5 years ago

   Thanks FatFreddysCat, that's a hard one to say!...may I add that to my page please?

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      FatFreddysCatposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I guess so. I have no claim to it, it's not my original work.
      
      https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Betty_Botter

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         Diana Grantposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Ok, I've added it - thanks.  It's quite old, so outside of copywright.

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