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   sstarclpposted 5 years ago

   Looking for some feedback to help me pass the Quality Assessment Process. I was not able to manually load capsules even though I added some to my paper.

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      You need to go back to the email that was sent to you. You'll see a suggestion and a link to get help - click on that and it will generate an automatic post for you. Otherwise, we can't see the article because it's not published.
      
      Meanwhile, spend some time at the Learning Center where there is a lot of help for beginners:
      
      https://hubpageshelp.com/
      
      This one will help you with basic hub construction:
      
      https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … ng-hubtool

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   I found the piece through your profile. What you have written is a personal experience blog and HubPages is not a blogging platform.
   
   As thereaggededge notes, you need to spend time at the Learning Center.

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   sstarclpposted 5 years ago

   It may be personal but it is an article about narcissist. Thank you for your feedback.

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      And that's why it didn't pass QAP. Nothing wrong with the topic; you just need to de-personalise it a bit. Write in a general way for your reader and keep one section for your personal story.

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         sstarclpposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you for your feedback. I made changes and it passed.

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            theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            That great.
            
            I notice that there are still some problems though. For example, you have a subheading, "How To Spot Narcissistic Abuse", but there's nothing in the following section explaining to readers how to spot narcissistic abuse. You have to 'write to the title' - if you promise readers something, then you have to deliver it right there after the subheading.
            
            Then the bit on 'flying monkeys'. I've never heard of that term before so I need it explained up front. As soon as you bring it into that subheading, insert an explanation straight away. You use quotes from Psychology Today, but you really need to expand on them so the reader knows what you are telling them. I still don't understand what a flying monkey is.
            
            The important thing about writing here is that you need your articles to be moved to one of the network (specialist) sites, where you will get more traffic. It won't be moved unless it is up to scratch. It'll stay on HubPages .com which is basically a holding pen.

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