I'd like feedback on my article: How You Will Get the Woman of Your Dream

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   Rabbi04posted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   My name is Jude,
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve?
   Inline with the rules of Hubopages I have no personal link but an ebook, which will improve my discussion on Amazon
   Thanks!
   
   Jude.
   
   Here is my article: How You Will Get the Woman of Your Dream (must be signed in to view)

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   Hi, Jude. I don’t understand why the word “undefined” is at the top of your article. In addition, you’ve misunderstood how to use Amazon capsules. You need to have read the book named in the capsule yourself and you also need to give your personal opinions about the book. Instead, you’ve copied a description found on multiple websites.
   
   There are some other points to consider. The article is about your advice for attracting women, so I don’t think links to other people’s advice on Quora are really appropriate. In addition, you need to check the title and the article for English errors.
   
   You also need to think about the way in which you’ve expressed your ideas related to women carefully. For example, you should consider rewording the section that says “Ask her some questions to find out her level of reasoning, when she fails it, try to teach her politely.” Some people might assume that you are saying that women are less intelligent than men, even though you may not have meant this. This is something to think about as you edit your article.

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   CYong74posted 4 years ago

   Other than the usual grammar and style errors, your advice is borderline questionable.
   
   While you didn't say it out loud, your tips strongly imply women are simplistic and superficial creatures who could be easily stereotyped, and who need to look up to men. As an international platform, I highly doubt HP would feature such chauvinistic mentality and risk the wrath of women worldwide.

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Indeed. I'd be keeping my daughter well away from this one

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   TessSchlesingerposted 4 years ago

   Your English is not of a high enough standard to be published. The number of grammatical errors would indicate that English might not be your first language. Is that correct.
   
   The second point is that women are not 'things.' They are not to be 'won.' Women are human beings - just like men are.

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   FatFreddysCatposted 4 years ago

   Ummm... wow.
   
   Anything I would add at this point would just be piling on, so I'll just say "Yeah, what everybody else said."

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