I'd like feedback on my article: Hair Care VS Hair damage

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   harish2leadposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Hair Care VS Hair damage (must be signed in to view)

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      AliciaCposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi. Your article is too short. It should be at least 1,000 words long and should include more capsules. In addition, the article contains English errors. Your bio contains language errors as well.
      
      I think you need to make the purpose of your article clearer. If the topics of the article are an itchy scalp, hair damage, and hair loss, you should go into more detail about these problems. Since your own problems seem to have lasted a long time, I assume that you have seen a doctor. You should consider recommending that your readers do, too, since the symptoms that you describe may require medical treatment.
      
      Another problem in the article is that you are naming specific products and saying that they are harmful and that people get "addicted" to them. It’s risky making statements like that, especially when you don’t include authoritative references to support your claims.

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      It doesn't make much sense to me and I don't see the point of the article. If you don't personally like corporate manufactured products then don't use them. There are many alternatives.

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      Bushra Iqbalposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      You're asking for information instead of providing it.

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      OldRosesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Your English is not good enough to write for HubPages.  HubPages is an American site and expects authors to be able to write in perfect English.  If you know a native English speaker, you can ask them to review your article and help you with your English. 
      
      Your article is too short.  It's not clear what your point is.  You need to spend some time reviewing the information in the Learning Center (Help button, upper right).  That will tell you everything you need to know to write and format articles for publication on HubPages.

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   I agree with AliciaC and add that you need to read the HP Guidelines.

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   harish2leadposted 5 years ago

   Thank You

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